Question

The following sentence may have an error in effective writing. The sentence or part of the sentence is *starred*. Choose the best revision for the *starred* part. If no revision is necessary, choose the first answer.

(will post answer choices in a sec!)

Answer 1

oh and the sentence!! haha :)

Answer 2

haha

Answer 3

*My father wrote a letter to the city manager, a complaint about the changes to the city pool hours.*

A. My father wrote a letter to the city manager, a complaint about the changes to the city pool hours.

B. My father wrote a letter, a complaint about the changes to the city pool hours, to the city manager.

C. A complaint about the changes to the city pool hours, my father wrote a letter to the city manager.

D. My father wrote a complaint about the changes to the city pool hours to the city manager, a letter.

***My answer: B

Answer 4

am i right??? and the entire sentence is starred :)

Answer 5

I think so, but let's ask the expert @Hero

Answer 6

B appears to be most correct here.

Answer 7

But if I were to write it....

Answer 8

my version would be ...
My father wrote a letter to the city manager complaining about the changes to the city pool hours.

Answer 9

hahaa okay :) so my answer is B??
and let's hear how @hero were to write it :) it'll probs make more sense :) lawlz

Answer 10

I would say:

My father wrote a complaint letter to the city manager concerning the changes made to the city pool hours.

Answer 11

@countonme123 that's a good way... that was kinda what i was looking for but i couldn't find it :/and @hero another good way also!!

Answer 12

but based on my answer choices given, my answer is B?

Answer 13

yup

Answer 14

awesome! thanks! @countonme123 ima give u the medal this time and can u pls give @hero one??? i can only give one :(

Answer 15

Good sentence @countonme123. I suppose you aspire to be a sports columnist one day.

Answer 16

What was that supposed to mean?

Answer 17

hahah once again LOL yalls :) thanks again!! I have one more :)ima post it now :) @countonme123 idk... seems like a compliment to me!! :D

Answer 18

I didn't mean anything by it. It was supposed to be a compliment. Now you're making it sound like I meant something negative. What's wrong with being a sports columnist like J.A. Adande?

Answer 19

I have never heard that one before... lol I don't trust this guy.

Answer 20

That guy makes plenty dough.

Answer 21

lol maybe some sports columnist have bad grammar?

Answer 22

lol whatevs

Answer 23

That doesn't seem to stop their bank accounts from being stacked.

Answer 24

sports columnists rock!! what's more fun than writing about sports?? well, other things obvi but ya know what i mean!! haha :)

Answer 25

With sports columns, it's not necessarily about grammar. It's more of the satire, creativity, insight, and clever thought that is placed into it.

Answer 26

i know right>?? sounds funn