Question

Please help me turn my 5 paragraph essay into an abstract. I have attached the word document below. @dpaInc @CliffSedge

Answer 1

Firstly, multicultural and multilingual are single words and don't need a hyphen (unless you're doing that deliberately for emphasis, which fits the theme.)

Answer 2

I was, however, I can change it if you feel it reads better.

Answer 3

That's up to you for purpose of style. Whomever is grading the essay may be more strict on spelling, though.

Answer 4

Good Point. Thank you for that.

Answer 5

Here's what I see are the main points. I simply deleted certain details.

"We live in a multicultural, multilingual country that is known as the economic capital of the world. Foreign language studies are important in today’s society.

Foreign language courses can help you develop independent thought by serving as a brain exercise.

when studying a foreign language you are forcing yourself to think in a whole new way; which gives your brain a work out.

taking a foreign language course will improve your college applications.
The majority of colleges require you to meet a foreign language credit as well as most college scholarships.

By learning a second language you are also preparing yourself for the workforce and the competition that comes with acquiring a job.
Foreign language skills will increase your career opportunities.

Having the ability to learn a second language in a public school setting and at no cost; is definitely a blessing that no one should pass up. "

Answer 6

You can combine those sentences with proper transitions, and maybe move some things around and it'll probably sound ok.

Answer 7

Great. Thank you for your help. I greatly appreciate it. Let me work on it and if you are still here you can tell me if it's good.

Answer 8

Now. It is suppose to be an argumentative abstract. Does this change anything?

Answer 9

Not really, you are putting forth an argument and backing it up with specifics. You make a solid case.

Answer 10

Yahoo!

Answer 11

Yahoo?

Answer 12

Abstract
We live in a multicultural, multilingual country that is known as the economic capital of the world. Therefore, foreign language studies are important in today’s society. Foreign language courses can help you develop independent thought by serving as a brain exercise. When studying a foreign language you are forcing yourself to think in a whole new way; which gives your brain a work out. Taking a foreign language course will improve your college application. The majority of colleges require you to meet a foreign language credit as well as most college scholarships. By learning a second language you are also preparing yourself for the workforce and the competition that comes with acquiring a job. Foreign language skills will increase your career opportunities and provide you with better advancement opportunities. Having the ability to learn a second language in a public school setting and at no cost is definitely a blessing that no one should pass up. Becoming a multilingual person will open your eyes to new experiences and endless career opportunities.

Answer 13

We live in a multicultural, multilingual country that is known as the economic capital of the world[; therefore,] foreign language studies are important in today’s society. Foreign language courses can help [to] develop *independent thought* (what does this mean?) by [providing mental] exercise. When studying a foreign language [one forces himself] to think in a whole new way[,] which gives [the] brain a [workout]. Taking a foreign language course [in high school] will improve [one's chances for acceptance to] colleges. The majority of colleges [in the U.S.] require [] foreign language credit, as [do] most college scholarships. By learning a second language [one can be better prepared] for the [multicultural] [workplace] and the competition that comes with acquiring a job. Foreign language skills will increase career opportunities and provide better advancement opportunities. Having the ability to learn a second language in a public school setting and at no cost is definitely a blessing that no one should pass up. Becoming a multilingual person will open your eyes to new experiences and [many more] career opportunities.

Answer 14

Maybe adding dashes for emphasis here is a good idea too:

"Having the ability to learn a second language in a public school setting - and at no cost - is definitely . . ."

Answer 15

Wow. Thanks for your help Cliff. I kept reading it and I felt it wasn't reading as great as it could. The feedback you gave really gives the abstract some life.

Answer 16

Would the dashes be OK grammatically?

Answer 17

independent thought means to think on your own.

Answer 18

Yes, the dashes are grammatically correct, they are used similarly to commas or parentheses, but add greater emphasis.