Question

I have a paragraph, and i want review before give this to the professor on Monday

Answer 1

where is the paragraph you want to review?

Answer 2

Our book, Black Beauty, characterize the autobiography of a horse, all his feelings and his experiences in life. This book teachs the conditions than the horses lived. it describes the kindness or the cruelty than they suffer. It explains than even when the animals can't speak, they express all their feelings with attitudes and body language. The text can be a true history or only a fictional prose narrative. The content was exposed in 48 chapters, about adventures, romance, danger excitement, and much more. This publication is an icon. it was subtitled in 1852 like " Uncle Tom's Cabin ", comparing the animal life with the suffering of human slavery who had been forced to serve as property to a masters.

Answer 3

I really appreciate the corrections about

Answer 4

okay so this sentence This book teachs the conditions than the horses lived. should have examples you should add examples of conditions to turn it into a complex or compound complex sentence the more of a scentence variaty the better paper and i assume a higher grade

Answer 5

oh and you get more praise by writing more than a paragraph think of a paragraph as a start add more info with more paragraphs

Answer 6

Can you give me one example for this sentence??? Please????

Answer 7

my homework is only one paragraph

Answer 8

A complex sentence has an independent clause joined by one or more dependent clauses. A complex sentence always has a subordinator such as because, since, after, although, or when or a relative pronoun such as that, who, or which.

Answer 9

A compound sentence contains two independent clauses joined by a coordinator. The coordinators are as follows: for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so. (Helpful hint: The first letter of each of the coordinators spells FANBOYS.) Except for very short sentences, coordinators are always preceded by a comma.

Answer 10

Yes, but can you give me a practice example????

Answer 11

After I came home, I made dinner.

(dependent clause: "After I came home")

(indpendent clause: I made dinner)

We visited the museum before it closed.

(dependent clause: before it closed.)

(independent clause: We visited the museum)

Answer 12

complex sentence

Answer 13

"Our book, Black Beauty, characterize the autobiography of a horse, all his feelings and his experiences in life. This book teachs the conditions than the horses lived. it describes the kindness or the cruelty than they suffer. It explains than even when the animals can't speak, they express all their feelings with attitudes and body language. The text can be a true history or only a fictional prose narrative. The content was exposed in 48 chapters, about adventures, romance, danger excitement, and much more. This publication is an icon. it was subtitled in 1852 like " Uncle Tom's Cabin ", comparing the animal life with the suffering of human slavery who had been forced to serve as property to a masters."

In the first sentence, what do you mean by "characterize?" This doesn't seem to make sense generally speaking, much less with the story itself. If you keep this word, at least add an 's' to the end to make it grammatically correct.

In the second sentence, 'teachs' is spelled 'teaches.' Also, combine the third sentence with the second to make a more informative, complex sentence (like cookies has been helpfully suggesting).

In the fourth sentence, try adding 'further' or 'also' before 'explains.' This might help enhance the language and descriptive nature of your analysis.

In the fifth sentence, what do you mean? Do you mean that the reader can interpret the text as either of these genres? Or do you mean that analysis of the text has left scholars unsure of the genre and therefore a best guess of the genre is one of these options? If you mean the latter, then you might try saying something like, 'Some people think ___. Others think ___..."

In the sixth sentence, what?? "The content was exposed"?? Who wrote this? Try simplifying to something like "In forty-eight chapters, the author described..."

In the seventh sentence, explain a little more of what you mean by "icon." Are you speaking religiously, as in a picture of a saint or biblical figure? Or are you speaking of those works that, like so many movies are dubbed, are "cult classics." Give more detail here to elucidate your point.

In the final sentence, you need a comma after 1852, you need to drop 'the' from in front of 'animal life,' change 'slavery' to 'slaves,' add a comma after slaves, and you need to either remove 'a' from before 'masters' or remove the 's' at the end of 'masters.'