Question

Can someone check/improve my thesis statement "For many years, we been living with species that we thought we didn't have any common with. We live in a place where there are intelligent animals, with the ability to perform the same tasks as human. Chimpanzees, who share 98% of our DNA, have the same characteristics to humans. As humans, we never thought that chimpanzees were smart as humans. Chimpanzees are among the most highly intelligent species because they know how to build things, communicate with each other, and can use their hands or feet to grasp or hold".

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Okay. Which sentence do you consider the thesis statement?

Answer 2

the last sentence

Answer 3

Your paper is about chimpanzees?

Answer 4

Yes! My prompt is "Intelligence among the chimpanzee"

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Sounds like an awful prompt to me. Hard to work with. "Among the chimpanzee" what do they mean by that? It doesn't sound like it includes humans.

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Basically, we have to describe why chimpanzee are intelligent. I really don't like this prompt.

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It seems like they are asking for information about chimpanzee society, and not about a comparison of them to humans.

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Like humans, Chimpanzees are social creatures that rely upon each other to survive.

I think I'd go with something like that.

Answer 9

It sounds better.

Answer 10

From there you can go into ways in which chimpanzee survival is reliant upon their intelligence.

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What do you think?

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I think it's a good idea

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@tryder How long do you have to finish the assignment?

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my teacher said it has to be two pages

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When's it due?

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on wednesday

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Edited: As humans, we were never fond of the idea that chimpanzees were as smart as humans. Chimpanzees are among the most highly intelligent species because of their ability to construct different objects. They also show their communicative skills, which are stellar. They are also able to grasp objects with either their hands or feet. <<< I am not sure if you are using what you have written of so, here is a better described thesis statement. :) Make sure your thesis statement is structured/well rounded, and if you're composing an essay, make sure to restate your thesis statement.

Answer 18

Okay. So, if you want to go with how chimpanzee society is based on their intelligence, you need to do a little bit of research on Chimpanzees. Jane Goodall is the most famous researcher of them. Have you heard of her?

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yes

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We could find something on YouTube, if you'd like. I'm good at find interesting stuff on YouTube.

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ok

Answer 22

Okay be right back

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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k5Q6-hh49mU

That looks like it's about the most promising.

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Let me know when you begin watching it and we can comment on it as we watch it.

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Are you there?

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yes

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sorry I forgot to tell you I was watching the video.

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Pause it.

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That information about the tool-making could be useful.

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yep

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the chimpanzees were using sticks as tools to fish for termites.

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Right. :)

Also noteworthy is the family structure: three generations living together.

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At one time, we thought that humans were the only animals that used tools, but Jane Goodall discovered that wasn't so when she saw a Chimpanzee using sticks as tools to fish for termites.

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There are several characteristics of chimpanzees that show their intelligence. For instance, at one time, we thought that humans were the only animals that used tools, but Jane Goodall, a researcher famous for her discoveries about them. discovered that wasn't so when she saw a Chimpanzee using sticks as tools to fish for termites.

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the communication signals, kissing, embracing holding hands, patting on the back, shaking the fist, swaggering, throwing rocks.All of these things humans do it

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That's just what I was about to mention! :)

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Chimpanzees have several of the same social traits that humans do. Their the communication signals, kissing, embracing holding hands, patting on the back, shaking the fist, swaggering, throwing rocks are also things we humans do.

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communication signals: kissing, . . .

Probably need a colon after "signals."

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that was a nice video

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Yeah. Gave some useful information, and it was fun to watch.

Answer 41

Are you only supposed to write a paragraph with a thesis statement?

Answer 42

Yes

Answer 43

Looks like you might have enough to make an introductory paragraph. They're usually only three or four sentences long. Is it a five paragraph essay that you're doing at this point in your classes?

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yes

Answer 45

I must say, you are a man or woman of few words.

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a man

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not very talkative, are you?

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not really

Answer 49

Doesn't make it much fun for me. Well, if you think you have enough to work with, I guess I'll be moving on.

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thanks @DonaldRoyMiller for your help

Answer 51

You're welcome. Good luck with the homework. It looks like you're off to a good start.

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"For many years, we been living with species that we thought we didn't have any common with. We live in a place where there are intelligent animals, with the ability to perform the same tasks as human. With the completion of the sequencing of the chimpanzee genome and the human in 2005 and 2003 respectively, one realizes that we have 98% of DNA bases in common. This has also correlated to similar behavioral and morphological characteristics to humans. Although sharing the same subfamily of Homininae as humans, chimpanzees were smart not considered as intelligent as humans. Chimpanzees are among the most highly intelligent species because they know how to build things, communicate with each other, and can use their hands or feet to grasp or hold".

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You may want to look up on the homology in terms of morphology and phylogenetics between chimps and Homo sapiens in detail via the Human Genome Project webpage ^^