Doesn’t learning how to sail sound awesome? Sailing feels great, looking at the sail full of strong wind and feeling the small waves roll steadily underneath you. Sailing is done all around the world, it is a sport, a hobby, and people have done it all throughout history. A sailboat has many parts and is complicated to sail. Some people even sail around the world.

Sailing has been used all throughout history. Most old boats could only sail in a few directions. None could sail straight upwind they could only sail upwind a little bit, mostly only downwind or sideways.

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Doesn’t learning how to sail sound awesome?   Sailing feels great, looking at the sail full of strong wind and feeling the small waves roll steadily underneath you.  Sailing is done all around the world, it is a sport, a hobby, and people have done it all throughout history.  A sailboat has many parts and is complicated to sail.  Some people even sail around the world.  

Sailing has been used all throughout history.  Most old boats could only sail in a few directions.  None could sail straight upwind they could only sail upwind a little bit, mostly only downwind or sideways.

anonymous · Answer

can some one grade this?

anonymous · Answer

plz help

anonymous · Answer

For the first paragraph I'd look at a thesaurus and use better adjectives. Using words like awesome and great aren't something you'd want to do in an essay question or essay.  "A sailboat has many parts and is complicated to sail." - also rewrite this sentence.
  
I'd add more details about the type of boats used to sail in the second paragraph.
Those are just my 2 cents.

anonymous · Answer

Two independent clauses in a sentence must be separated by a semicolon; do it like this. You can also use a comma and a conjunction, and I have done so with this sentence.