Question

Hey I wrote a poem and want some people to read it and tell me what you think please.

Answer 1

Sometimes when I sit and think,
I often think too hard,
I think it through too much,
And I take it way too far.

I remember all the mean things,
I remember all the bad,
I remember nothing good,
And make myself too sad.

Thinking no one cares,
I often cry for hours,
It tries its best to push me,
Off of awfully tall towers.

It pushes me to far,
Way past the edge,
I trip and stumble over,
Waiting for the end.

I close my eyes and fall,
And grasp my swollen heart,
Full of empty,
Full of bad,
Waiting to break apart.

It overflows with sadness,
Like cascading waterfalls,
And plunges deep in sorrow,
And all I do is bawl.

To sit and bawl my eyes out,
Kindess being a foreigner,
I grab my box of tissues,
And crawl into the corner.

I sit and wait in darkness,
For something pleasant to arrive,
And all around me roses grow,
Growing just to thrive.

So delicately beautiful,
Yet so full of thorns,
I try not to touch them,
But they wingspan me to my bones.

All I feel is pain,
Big and red and loud,
But also very dark,
And often with no sound.

I float in nothing,
And wait for nothing,
Because if happiness did arrive,
It would really be quite something.

I think of what can happen,
I think of what can change,
If it is not too much to ask,
Just take away the pain.

Take away the sorrow,
Take away the sad,
But more than all of that,
Take away the bad.

Take away what makes me think,
What makes it all add,
What makes it seem like more,
What makes me oh so mad.

In your fury,
And in your hate,
And also in your prison,
That locks you in a crate.

Surrounded by the evil,
Surrounded by the rage,
I cannot guaruntee,
Things will quickly change.

But I can really tell you,
What they say is true,
Give these thing some time,
And they just may change for you!

It may take long,
And feel like eternity,
But all that really counts,
Is the lesson in the journey.

The End.

Answer 2

I think you're a very brave person to share your frustration into the world

Answer 3

Thanks. :)

Answer 4

the poem is a little cluttered and may be broken into shorter ones
keep in mind about a theme and not just ramblings

Answer 5

really amazing... i suck at rhyming and expressing my feelings so this just wows me to the fullest... if you ever feel sad just message me and ill be glad to chat with you...

Answer 6

element, stop hitting on ninja

Answer 7

im being nice

Answer 8

thanks ninja! love ya! ;)