Question

Can someone rate my essay based on how good it is?

Answer 1

Title: Why Mcdonald's?

So one day, I was with my friends. They asked “hey, do you want to go to Mcdonalds?” I was like “sure, lets go. I could really use a double cheeseburger”. So we hop in my car, and we drive off to Mc.Donalds. Once we arrive, I noticed that the drive thru was packed. So I decided to park the car, and ask my friends what they want. Johnny says “I want 10 chicken nuggets”. Joe said “I want a bic mac”. So I ask for their money, and they give it too me. I then leave the car, and enter the fine establishment. I ask the cashier, if I can have a double cheeseburger with only ketchup, she replies “sure!”. I then order my friends food. After I got the food, I take the bags, and get back into the car. Once we get home, I pull out my burger excited to eat it. I open the bag, and noticed that no cheese was hanging off the side of the bun. So I become suspicious. I lift the top bun, and sure enough, NO CHEESE. I cried. I cried so hard I ran to my room and locked my self in. 2 weeks later I am still crying. But this time, I whisper to myself “why, Mcdonald's?”

Answer 2

Is there a specific scale you want us to use?

Answer 3

Yes, from 0-10

Answer 4

Okay there's a few grammatical issues and it's quite short for it to be an essay. With those two items in consideration, I'd rate the essay a 3 or 4, mostly because it's short. However, if there's not a length requirement, I'd rate it a 6/7 because of your grammatical issues.

Answer 5

Need help proofreading?

Answer 6

No, it's okay. I typed this as a joke to hopefully get good reactions. But I will give you a medal for taking me seriously and trying too help.

Answer 7

Haha, okay!

Answer 8

I honestly thought my grammar was pretty good, considering English isn't my first language.

Answer 9

It was just little rules that you forgot about. Like keeping things in past tense and what not. But you did do well! :)

Answer 10

Can you tell me the grammatical mistakes?

Answer 11

1) "So I decided to park the car, and ask my friends what they want. Johnny says “I want 10 chicken nuggets”. Joe said “I want a bic mac”. "

When you said "decided" you were using past tense, so it should have been Johnny said instead of Johnny says.

2) Refrain from saying things like "I was like" lol.

3) "and they give it too me" -- use to instead of too.

4) "I then leave the car and enter the fine establishment" -- left, entered

etc... it's mostly your past/present tense that was off.

Answer 12

Yeah, I never understood the right time to use "too" or "to".

Answer 13

Too is like also. To is like wanting to do something. Like "I'm going to the store" and then someone else says "me too".

Answer 14

Oh, okay. I understand now. Thank you.

Answer 15

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Answer 16

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