Question

Why me?

Answer 1

Why Me?
Searching through the asiles
looking for the smiles i'll never see
Why me?
What makes these sad faces roam the streets?
Why me?

Bullying, for the fun of it
Why me?
Racism, attacking a different color
Why me?
Evil words, slicing through my soul
Why me?

then here's the speech that goes with it:

Why me is just a little song I wrote to show that bulling, is a problem. Racism, is a problem. Verbal assault, is a problem. reply and tag in our freinds and fans, share it with everyone you know. #stopthehate

Answer 2

Tell me what you think! Do you agree or no?

Answer 3

nice d00d

Answer 4

um xDre15 im a girl...

Answer 5

k gurl

Answer 6

It lacks being rememberable easily as well as the analogies do not seem, to me at least, that great. Then again I am stupid.

Answer 7

tbh i'm too lazy to give a constructive criticism. i'm with opcode on this. still good tho d00d

Answer 8

lol its based of song called hey you http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jQcBwE6j09U... also i wrote this at 2am

Answer 9

It should go into the English section.

The hashtag at the end is what got me.

Answer 10

why? whats wrong with it?

Answer 11

#hashtag

Answer 12

also it is in the writing and design section as well

Answer 13

#ShrimpDimps

Answer 14

I'm not going to provide criticism because I'm too harsh. It's good for a start, I guess. Needs revision.

Also, you're in the Feedback Section...

Answer 15

i know my freind @fatel posted something like this a while back... and go ahead on the criticism. i always what to know what i can do to improve

Answer 16

* @fateal

Answer 17

(I'm not good with writing or music, just take my criticism as an ordinary person who dont know anything and tries to understand the message of this song lyrics. I maybe right, I maybe wrong.. but this is just my opinion okay?)
Tbh, I didn't get the idea quickly because of the transitions. You put the words "why me?" after each different sentences. I feel like something's missing and 'why me' is not connected to the sentences. I would suggest that it will be better if you could organize the idea that will lead to the question "why me?"
Well I think it's better if you let us hear the song. Maybe my mind will change :)

Answer 18

wolf idk which one your talking about, but Im pretty sure that it was an essay (will a short story) or the post that i spoke about racism?
I talk from my heart, what ever comes to my mind is what you'll hear. i might go harsh...but its just the truth.
and keep it up ^^ practice makes perfection <3