Question

I need feedback on this stat! I'm in my Revise and Edit stage and its due tommorow!

Answer 1

I'll review it... Is it a paper?

Answer 2

Wait wrong one

Answer 3

@ninja.turtlesss the second one is my paper.

Answer 4

Reviewing it now (:

Answer 5

the second one? The first one is an older paper. Bullying_u3_l12.dox is my current one.

Answer 6

Yes, the second one.

Answer 7

Okay. I just get paranoid in English. Even though my teacher says I write good papers, I still panic a little.

Answer 8

And yes, in case you're wondering, I AM a girl.

Answer 9

I like it

Answer 10

Thanks! I didn't know you were reading it @TheAsker2002

Answer 11

B)

Answer 12

I revised it, to how I would type it. But it is your paper (:

Answer 13

I love it. Although there is a little overuse of commas in this:

We need something in schools, where bystanders will be punished, if, they don’t step in, and bullies will be punished more severely.

Answer 14

We need something in schools where bystanders will be punished if they don't step in

Answer 15

Its one continual thought, no pauses when saying it.

Answer 16

No overuse in commas. Commas are supposed to come after, at the most, 5 words. If there is not a comma, it is not correct... Trust me, I studied this last year.

Answer 17

Actually a Comma is a punctuation mark indicating a pause between parts of a sentence.

Answer 18

bystanders shouldn't be punish for doing nothing

Answer 19

The bullies should though

Answer 20

Do not use a comma in the following cases:
After a brief prepositional phrase. (Is it a single phrase of fewer than five words?)

Answer 21

@TheAsker2002 It's an argumentative. I'm arguing that bystanders do need to be punished ;)