Question

Would anyone be willing to proofread this paper I wrote to my teacher to prove that what he really wants is an essay rather than a paragraph?

Answer 1

@nobrainiachere
@e.mccormick

Answer 2

:O i love that poem.

Answer 3

XD that wasn't really the point..

Answer 4

Ik... but as i was reading i saw it and i was like "OOOOO"

Answer 5

I'm sorry lol

Answer 6

Haha, don't be..
But when you've finished reading, please do tell me if there is anything that could be changed or worded differently, etc.

Answer 7

I might change what i think could be changed and post it so you can take a look at it.

Answer 8

Alright.

Answer 9

In this sentence "I knew something wasn’t right." What if you changed "wasn't" to "couldn't be"

Answer 10

:/

Answer 11

Stupid question marks....

Answer 12

so it would show up as "I knew something couldn't be right."

Answer 13

How does that sound?

Answer 14

Yeah, I wasn't sure how else to word that..
Maybe "I knew something did not seem right." ?

Answer 15

Or "I knew something seemed fishy about that."?

Answer 16

I prefer the first one.

Answer 17

did not

Answer 18

Okay, and should I use the contraction "didn't", or just leave it at "did not"?

Answer 19

I think if you were going to be writing a formal letter\essay you would not use the contraction.

Answer 20

It's a mix of both formal and casual, so whichever sounds best I suppose.

Answer 21

More on the formal side, though, so maybe.

Answer 22

Well, if it is both formal and casual then i would suggest using not contracted words but once in a while when you really need to it would be Ok.

Answer 23

And this sentence "That’s just not right" doesn't sound right.

Answer 24

"That's just not right"

Answer 25

I think we should come up with something different.

Answer 26

Yeah. Suggestions?

Answer 27

"That just does not seem correct"?

Answer 28

So the whole thing would sound like this.

Answer 29

When you asked us to write a paragraph concerning the literary tools and elements of Romantic writing found within Edgar Allan Poe’s “The Raven,” and to include both examples and supports for each element found, I knew something did not seem right. Firstly, this assignment would be pages long, yet everything was to be contained within just one paragraph. That’s just does not seem correct.

Answer 30

ARGH!!!

Answer 31

You might need to refresh.

Answer 32

Yeah, I though of that.. but is "correct" really the correct word to use? ;p

Answer 33

Yeah, I though of that.. but is "correct" really the correct word to use? ;p

Answer 34

"That's just does not seem right." does not sound... well.. right.

Answer 35

Yea, I know.

Answer 36

Me personally, I would Leave out thongs like "That's just not right." So I agree. I would go more along that it didn't seem he was wrong, more like he was on the start of something of a bigger report. Then, I would attach my essay, (Or an outline) To show why it would make more sense that it was a essay. Personally I also realized that it gets better effects not to say "You" in an argument, debate, or anything in that family. just I statements. EX: Instead of- " When you asked us to write a paragraph concerning the literary tools and elements of Romantic..;" I would say when I heard that we were supposed to. So that it doesn't seem as aggressive.

Answer 37

Don't mean to be nit picky or anything.... just tryinna help...

Answer 38

Yea, I can see what you're saying.. but it's not really an essay, rather, just a paper that's trying to get a point across.

Answer 39

Are you saying what he wants you to do isn't an essay or what you are trying to wright.

Answer 40

He want's her to write a paragraph explaining the literary tools and elements of romantic writing found within Edgar Allen Poe's "The Raven"

Answer 41

But this would take up multiple pages

Answer 42

And one paragraph usually does not take up even half a page.

Answer 43

so what he is actually asking her to write is an essay.

Answer 44

I'm trying to show him that what he's really asking of us is an essay, not a lengthy paragraph.

What he told us to write was a paragraph containing the information that was just posted above, but really, a paragraph is incorrect.

Answer 45

Am i correct Whitemonsterbunny?

Answer 46

Yes, you're correct.

Answer 47

Thank you.

Answer 48

Do you understand what is being asked of her now? @Wolfboy

Answer 49

I wasn't talking about the whole thing. Just about her last comment towards me. But yeah. I know

Answer 50

I gotta go, but thanks for any additions! You guys are awesome! <3
Btw, long time no see, Wolfboy.. I missed you ;3

Answer 51

Missed me? yey :3 missed ya to. Talk to you another time I guess. Have a good night

Answer 52

Thanks, you too. ^.^