Question

I need this sentence revised/edited please, so I makes sense:


Many men in the book didn’t like the enemies so when they got to their sites when they were fighting they would steal their food, but in War Horse two soldiers on complete different sides helped each other to cut Joey out of the barbed wire and even did a coin toss to see who got to keep the horse (Baez, Ivone).

Answer 1

@EclipsedStar @sammixboo

Answer 2

Many men in the book didn’t like the enemies, so when they got to their sites when they were fighting they would steal their food.On the other side in War Horse two soldiers on complete different sides helped each other to cut Joey out of the barbed wire and even did a coin toss to see who got to keep the horse (Baez, Ivone).

Answer 3

Besides the comma in the beginning and period between the book and the war horse, it looked good to me.

Answer 4

Many men in the book disliked their enemies, so when they got to their designated fighting sites, they would steal the provisions from the enemies. However, in War Horse, two soldiers on completely different sides helped each other to cut Joey out of the barbed wire. They even did a coin toss to see who got to keep the horse (Baez, Ivone).

I tweaked it a bit.

Answer 5

\(\color{blue}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @luto3636
Besides the comma in the beginning and period between the book and the war horse, it looked good to me.
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I think the "complete" should have been "completely". :)

Answer 6

Other than that, it looks good.

Answer 7

Many men in the book like the enemies, so when they got to the site where they were fighting, they stole their food. On the War horse side two soldiers from different sides helped cut Joey of the barbed wire. They even did a coin toss to see who would keep the horses. (Baez, and Ivone)