Question

My Poem is in an attachment!

Answer 1

@<3teddybearhugs<3
@SamsungFanBoy
@Sam_Aka_Sara
@braves12
@OM14forever
@xo.minnie.xox

Answer 2

Great poem it has a few typos but other than that it is amazing :)

Answer 3

Thanks.

Answer 4

:)

Answer 5

Its really good!!!!!!!!!

Answer 6

Yeah but it doesn't ryme a lot.

Answer 7

There are many different types of poems hun and trust me half of those types DON'T have a bunch of rhyming words. Yours is perfect rhyming words or not... You just have to write what you feel :) @sugarplum15

Answer 8

@sugarplum15

What @~*Ashtyn*~ was on point. Write what you feel, even if it doesn't rhyme. I personally like to rhyme my poems as well as I can, but that's just my style. Write the way that you feel is best and trust me, it will be perfect. You just have to work on grammar and spelling ;p

Answer 9

Yeah that's what i'm afraid off! :P

Answer 10

I made a couple of spelling tweaks. How does this look?


I always see him walking in the halls
My gaze seems so small because of the hall
He's popular and I'm not, so because of this I'm all
Maybe we could get together but why would he bother
When my Father told me not to bother
Sometimes I push my glasses up and keep my head high
But then he spoke to me and I got all jittered up
Maybe we come from two different worlds, one popular and rich and other just small
Maybe such two worlds couldn't combine, such as lava and sun.
Maybe such two people couldn't combine since we're different
But why, so much pain when I suffer it all?

This is minus any punctuation tweaks. If you'd like me to try to tweak punctuation, let me know.

Answer 11

Okay but it was really good! Thanks.

Answer 12

It's my 3rd poem and it's about summer!
@HazelLuv99
@SamsungFanBoy
@xo.minnie.xox
@~*Ashtyn*~

Answer 13

I was going to ask you... Do you mind if I edit your first poem?

Answer 14

Sure @~*Ashtyn*~

Answer 15

Great :)

Answer 16

Great Poem! :D

Answer 17

Thanks @SamsungFanBoy

Answer 18

No problemo :P

Answer 19

Its great!!!!!!!

Answer 20

Thanks @xo.minnie.xox
It just came to me, lol.

Answer 21

wow that was good keep up the good wrk

Answer 22

Thanks....

Answer 23

yup anytime

Answer 24

I'm going to be adding my 4th poem in a little time now.

Answer 25

Awesome! :)

Answer 26

@~*Ashtyn*~ Did you edit my 1st poem?

Answer 27

Well I started then..
My computer shut down so I have to start over. But I am working on it now. :)

Answer 28

Oh okay.

Answer 29

This is my 4th poem.
@braves12
@HazelLuv99
@SamsungFanBoy
@pinkcandyrosez882
@Taye23
@~*Ashtyn*~

Answer 30

tht rlly good i like it

Answer 31

Thanks @HazelLuv99

Answer 32

@xo.minnie.xox

Answer 33

ur welcome @sugarplum15

Answer 34

Done! :D
I understand if you don't like it... My paraphrasing skills are quite poor lol But just let me know :)

Answer 35

Beautiful!

Answer 36

OMG!! I love it
@~*Ashtyn*~

Answer 37

@smartuser445

Answer 38

Seriously?... Haha maybe I am better than I thought. If you want any other poems edited I would be happy to do it :) (btw you can have the edit just give me credit for the editing ^_~ )

Answer 39

I didn't quite get to see it but I'm sure it was good! :D

Answer 40

@~*Ashtyn*~ Edited so I am making it #5 and also he/she is me partner in crime for poems! Lol

Answer 41

She ^_^

Answer 42

Oops! ^_^

Answer 43

Haha it is a common mistake

Answer 44

Yeah, I think we all got it once in a while.

Answer 45

Ya, It is so common I had to clearly specify it in my bio lol

Answer 46

lol. I'll updating two or three more poems later on my darlings!

Answer 47

@HazelLuv99
@SamsungFanBoy
@xo.minnie.xox
@~*Ashtyn*~ , and can you see if you can edit it? Cause I feel like it wasn't good enought.
@braves12

Answer 48

Sure I'll edit it :)

Answer 49

Thanks @~*Ashtyn*~

Answer 50

I realize I changed this one ALOT more than the last one and if you don't like it I will try again but if you love it then great :)

Answer 51

I LOVE IT!! @~*Ashtyn*~ Once again you did!!

Answer 52

Wow! I am being a total over achiever today lol
<(^-^<) ~(*-*)~ (>^_^)>
hehe...

Answer 53

I think I'm going to promote you as my Editor @~*Ashtyn*~

Answer 54

YAY!

Answer 55

Thanks girl!

Answer 56

No prob! Editor @~*Ashtyn*~

Answer 57

Wow it even sounds right when you say it haha

Answer 58

Lol! Chat with me on message so we can talk more. :) @~*Ashtyn*~

Answer 59

K :)

Answer 60

I made another poem, it was suppose to be about babies but it changed into how strong a love for the parents to love their baby.

@braves12
@JackofallTradez
@SamsungFanBoy
@smartuser445
@xo.minnie.xox
@~*Ashtyn*~

Answer 61

Reading/Editing now! ^-^