Question

pleas help me!? I WILL MEDAL AND FAN YOU!!

Answer 1

Well if you look at the improved fable, the part "an all grown up lion" was not in the original, so I'd highlight it in blue. It makes you think of an adult lion rather than just any lion.

Answer 2

Ok, so the words/sentences that was not on the original on goes blue...?

Answer 3

Well not exactly. I'd highlight any additional details in blue. Let me find an example for yellow and green.

Answer 4

A Lion asleep in his lair was woken up by a Mouse running over his face.

An all grown up Lion, who was sleeping in his lair, was suddenly a woken by a 5 inch, dark grey mouse, that was running over the lions yellow, almost orange, furry face.

So the sentence structure is different here, isn't it? I'd highlight the whole thing in yellow EXCEPT for the words that need to be highlighted in blue. What do you think would need to be highlighted in blue?

Answer 5

5in dark grey mouse and yellow, almost orange, furry

Answer 6

Indeed.

Answer 7

The lion got so angry that his face didn't even look that yellow/orange color, instead it was a dark red.

Losing his temper he seized it with his paw and was about to kill it.

Now I'd highlight the part "the lion got so angry" in green because it's a different choice of words than "losing his temper"

Answer 8

ok and would i hid light the look that yellow/orange color, instead it was a dark red. in blue too or no?

Answer 9

Yes

Answer 10

ok is it ok if i go finish it of and then post it with all the highlighted stuff so you can tell me if its correct or not?

Answer 11

Sure.

Answer 12

thanks!

Answer 13

@kyanthedoodle

Answer 14

you did a nice job on rewriting the fable, the parts highlighted are correct also.

Answer 15

Looks good to me.

Answer 16

Oh thank you both @thatgirlwhonooneknows and @KyanTheDoodle