Question

Poem review for my creative writing class? I'm being graded on word choice, whether I've conveyed emotion, flow, and coherence.

Answer 1

The pain a tack driving into my temples,
The dark a shadow growing in my vision,
The heartache a sharp drumbeat in my chest,
And my feelings locked deep behind
A lying mask with a cheating smile
Looking out from close behind my eyes

The worry a heartbeat from the surface,
The panic left alone to die in its corner,
The tears burning against a sturdy dam,
And the self-worth a writhing minuscule mass
Behind the hulking armor of an egotist,
Shallow but strong as tempered steel

Words are used to dredge up the painful past
Scowls and glares always chipping away at me
Hate bombarding me from every side
And though the love tries its best to heal the scars,
They multiply too fast to disappear-
And I never have known enough love.

Answer 2

Help would be appreciated. Have to turn it in tomorrow night.

Answer 3

very good!! I would give it 100

Answer 4

I think it is amazing! Great job!

Answer 5

Great to see so much expressing......

Answer 6

@kittykatcruch @xxhaich @Breannalol Thank you guys!