Question

@jabez177

Answer 1

The first 3 Paragraphs are good but I'm trying to think of another word for Paragraph #1 and let me check the rest.

Answer 2

take ya time

Answer 3

Hold on real quick. I'm gonna go check this person's question and I'll be right back. History is so easy. :P

Answer 4

k gurl

Answer 5

All these times I said I loved you, but what could I do?
I'm sorry, I couldn't go on, I was through
I couldn't do it anymore
My heart had sunk straight through the floor

Answer 6

"I couldn't do it for long
My heart sounds like a broken gong"

Answer 7

ahhhhh dagnabbit I forgot what tune I was going for with the last 2 lines

Answer 8

But your Lyrics are pretty good though. :)

Answer 9

thanks :>
so that would work, but that part is about like
breaking off contact with the person, so I want it to have more of a feeling of finality rather than like "I tried to but couldn't hold up", ya get me?

Answer 10

Yeah. Let me try and think harder.

Answer 11

After all that had happened we were both so forgiving
Because without you, I just couldn't go on living
But everything was still the same
And I've only myself to blame

Answer 12

"But everything was just a game
And I lost so you could gain."

Answer 13

Now, I know that you love him, and I just feel so bad
That I'm hoping he turns out to be worse than your dad
But right now that seems very unlikely
But I just can't handle being with nobody
But that's just how it'll have to be

Answer 14

"But right now that seems very unlikely
And there's nobody to be my bunny
But that's just how it'll have to be"

Answer 15

You're a Great song writer! :)

Answer 16

Never give up! :)

Answer 17

thanks yo!
I think I'll use the game line, but I'm thinking instead of the bunny line maybe
"And there are plenty of fish in the sea
but there's no one as perfect as you are to me"

Answer 18

ok so slight edits have been made

Answer 19

also after that, first two lines have been changed to

I knew there was no way I was going to stay
I just had to leave, and go far away