Question

Do you think my new story is a good start? I drew a picture when i was younger and I just started it from there. (Medal and fan for best answer).

Answer 1

‘Clever farmer…’ The rabbit thought grimily as his glimmering blackberry eyes examined the glassy sapphire river. ‘So, he dug a ditch and then filled it up with water to keep ‘varmints’, like me, out of his exquisite, flourished vineyard. Ha, you think that could keep me out! You are surely joking.’ Russet felt a chuckle rising up from his furry, petite chest. The farmer obviously didn’t know Russet if he thinks that he could out best this rabbit! This particular rabbit could make it through any garden’s defense forces with little to no trouble whatsoever! At the end of the day, he always gets what he wants; succulent and luscious fruits and veges. However, this wasn’t going to be any ordinary trial… His eyes scanned the premises in search of anything he could use to his benefit. His silvery whiskers twitched in recognition. ‘Bingo…’ He spotted two pieces of sturdy, chocolate-looking drift wood. He sniffed arrogantly, ‘this is too easy…’

Answer 2

You draw so well!!! Better than I can lol. You have AMAZING vocabulary, and I love the short story(:

Answer 3

Thank you so much! I am starting to write short stories of tales and etc, and I was wondering how this was! I am collecting everyone's feedback before I close, but I bet yours is the best :3!

Answer 4

Thanks(: I used to love to write stories, but mine were really long and I'd loose interest after a while, so I started writing songs instead.

Answer 5

Cool, that seems nice! (I am so bad at writing songs, I stick to writing stories. XD)

Answer 6

Great lexicon , keep it up ...

Answer 7

pretty good ^_^ try writing a story about people!!! I'd be interested in a mystery by you... XD

Answer 8

Oh I did, into the woods. It is about a little girl the yearns to go into the mysterious woods that her mother forbids her to go in. '"That girl is more and more like her father each day...Always the adventurer", A sigh escaped from the woman, as she untied the apron from around her.' One day she disregards her mother's warnings and goes into the forest, with her kitten Chip chip! However, she doesn't know what darkness lurks ahead. Will she met a new friend? Or will she be caught up from her own consequential sequences? Though my disk space was low, and I deleted my story so I am trying to rewrite after the vineyard @RhondaSommer

Answer 9

you're really good and i love the story. and i think that the other one is really good and sounds like a good idea. Are you ever going to publish them? I have a friend who drew comics about friendship and bullying and I told her she should publish them. Now I'm telling you! I bet others would love to read them! Keep up with the writing!

Answer 10

Post this to the English and Writing sections.