Question

Can someone read my introduction and help me add a few more words?

Answer 1

In high school, why did writing a paper the night before it was due still counted as work? Shouldn't that have failed miserably, leaving the student a shell of anxiety and regret? When wanting to finish our assignments quickly we tend to make mistakes and not realize it. Then we have to deal with a low grade. At college in some courses, a low grade can be unacceptable to pass, they required a grade of “C” or higher. Otherwise, there are some consequences like having to re-take the class once again or having to pay out of pocket if receiving financial aid. In college our responsibilities immensely grow from those in high school which it helps me improve in college level writing.

Answer 2

@biooverload

Answer 3

Do you want me to proofread it or just give you some more ideas to mention (since it's an intro paragraph, you need to have the topic sentences of other paragraphs in it)?

Answer 4

both if you can
& that's what i thought but my professor said he doesn't want a high school 5 paragraph essay anymore. so i changed it all

Answer 5

what i did was talked about some ways i've used responsibility in college and i my conclusion i talked about how important it is @biooverload

Answer 6

lol how long does he want the paper then? You need to know so you can know how to organize it. But yeah, I can proofread it for ya. I recommend not opening with a question. It's a cliché at this point; I was told the "Did you know...?" thing ended in 8th grade. So just reword that sentence, but change "counted" to "count"

Answer 7

Put a comma after "quickly" in sentence 3

Answer 8

Comma after "Then" in sentence 4. Commas after "At college", and after "in some courses", as well

Answer 9

He actually gave me that attention grabber to start with @biooverload

Answer 10

and the whole essay has to be 750-1000 words but he wants the introduction to at least be 150 words and i believe there's only 122 words.

Answer 11

Oh gotcha. Well that's weird then lol n sorry, I was afk

Answer 12

Replace the comma after "pass" (sentence 5) with a period

Answer 13

Change "required" to "require" in (what is now) sentence 6

Answer 14

You could rewrite that sentence to read, "College courses often require a "C" to be "passing." or something like that. I'm not sure if the C should be in quotation marks or not

Answer 15

brb

Answer 16

Thank you & I added an extra sentence at the end so i made my word count for the introduction

Answer 17

@biooverload

Answer 18

You're welcome, @babyx3boo happy to help. Besides, I love proofreading lol you're just missing commas mostly. Nothing major tbh; it's just the perfectionist in me coming to light, is all lol