Question

this is little rap i will be adding with a song please give advice idc if it's bad or good that will only help me improve as a songwriter

Answer 1

I woke up in the morning like going to the club not no church like I can do that anyday, god gonna forgive me anyway,don’t take anything seriously,life full of misory people like f*ck trump vote for Hilary I use to think the US was about liberty but it was all foolery but I ain’t worrying about it just gonna live life and strive for victory,but like you know pac was the best rapper but now it’s all history I hope your listening to me because nowadays life is a mystery…I just want to get that money and that silvery all these cops killing black kids but **** that it ain’t no injury,cuz like dude this is a war between demons and angels the world want to give all of us labels but if you believe it then it becomes reality I live life to my fullest and just do it practically, got deez other rapers doing nothing but pretend man **** this ****it ain’t nothing like back then. But long story short you got perverts and thugs out here while kids ending up dead,I just saw on the news the other day kid got shot….was he black? (Yep) that’s what I thought but I’m remaining the same and beating this game and don’t give 0 **** if you don’t like me cuz I’m remaining the same cuz if you don’t understand then you need to open up your ears cuz I’m saying it loud and clear got BloodtearAngel spittin fire dude the end is near.

Answer 2

i like it but I dont know much about music

Answer 3

i wrote this in 5mins so sorry if it's looootssss of mistakes

Answer 4

hmm, I like it very much, I dont know how you could improve, im so unhelpful XD

Answer 5

lol thx ^-^

Answer 6

now need to make the song more fuller

Answer 7

its good... but please even if you censor it, try to tone down with the swear words :)

Answer 8

but very meaningful rap indeed :)

Answer 9

appreciate the feedback

Answer 10

the lyrics are good :)
if you sing it with proper soundtrack and rhythm then it will be great :~)

Answer 11

right when i edit it i'll go down on the swear words and then add a rhythm to it because so far all i got is de rap

Answer 12

It's good i'd like to hear it again when you get sound with it :)

Answer 13

@BloodTearAngel
Welp, I'm going to be really mean right now.
Ready?
Firstly, a moderator (amongst many mods) has adequately said that rap's don't really belong in the music section.
Secondly, rap doesn't need all this swearing. I think you should cut back on it.
Thirdly, what is it about rap that people like so much?
Its nothing but speaking words really fast over a heavy bass beat. Where is the melody in that? Where is the emotion and the meaning?
I'm not trying to cut you down, but merely am saying a few thoughts. Its always baffling to me.
I mean your lil rap here does nothing for me lyrically. All it seems to be is a bunch of words scrabbled together in a very unrealistic attempt to rhyme or have sense to it.

Answer 14

lolfirst of all i'm adding this rap to a song like i said....secondly ight whatever thanks for the feedback