Question

What do you guys think
A song im writing right now

Until the day I die
my hearts for you, for you
Until the day I die
my hearts for you
As time go by
I race to be with you
But if you died right now
You know that I'd die to
I'd die too to be with you

How im feeling

Answer 1

aww

Answer 2

i like it

Answer 3

cute

Answer 4

Thanks u guys ive been hurt so im tryin somethin new in my music career is tryin be positive

Answer 5

kay

Answer 6

Hi there. I like the concept, would you mind if I showed you something?
Your original draft:
Until the day I die
my hearts for you, for you
Until the day I die
my hearts for you
As time go by
I race to be with you
But if you died right now
You know that I'd die to
I'd die too to be with you

I would rewrite it to something along the lines of...

Until the day I die
my heart's for you
Until the day I die
I cry for you

And then the rest of that stanza. It lessens the repetition but it still gets the point across.

Answer 7

@callmejax

Answer 8

Is this song about someone
I like it it's cute