In no fewer than three sentences, critique the following paragraph. Explain where it could be improved. Then, in your own words, rewrite the paragraph to make its writing stronger. Make sure you include a hook, supporting evidence, and a topic sentence. Use correct spelling and grammar.Playing in the snow is one of my happiest childhood memories. The winter offers more than a time for kids to have fun. There are many things to do in the snow. It is unfortunate that so many people find the wintertime annoying. More people should step outside to enjoy the snow. I am glad I grew up where it sno

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megwatskies · Answer

Well, i can't write the paragraph for you. But try to make the sentences more complex and flowing. The way it is now is short and choppy. Like in the sentene "theree are many things to do in the snow" try to add some examples of things to do like sledding and snowball fights.

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