Question

It's saying to revise your paragraph but I'm not sure how to do the things its saying, someone help please

Second, William Wordsworth uses imagery and diction to show how nature influenced his blissfulness by applying a romantic style of writing. He is an author who deems that nature creates a miracle cure for sadness. Using imagery and specific words to convey his delight and appreciation for his surroundings. In the beginning, Wordsworth uses words with negative connotations, but his mood quickly changes as he sees the field of flowers. Meanwhile he’s there he uses positive diction that creates images of a beautiful field with swaying daffodils. “Ten thousand saw I at a glance, tossing their heads in a sprightly dance” The “sprightly dance” of the daffodils illustrates an inspirational joy he discovered in nature. He uses a simile, “Continuous as the stars that shine and twinkle on the milky way,” to compare to the field of flowers to a sky of stars. This creates an image of beauty beyond words. He is saying that the large field of daffodils shares the same amount of wonder and beauty as a big sky with stars. As can be seen, William uses imagery and diction to reveal how nature influences his joyful mood by using a romantic style of writing.
Revision Focus: Idea Development and Transitions
Carry out the following revisions to improve your second body paragraph.
1. Introduction of quotation: Improve the introduction of at least two of your quotations. Highlight the revision.
2. Evidence: Add or change (make it shorter, make it longer, or change it entirely) two examples in the paragraph. If you add an example, be sure it is explained. Highlight the revision.
3. Explanation: Strengthen the explanation of two of your examples by connecting the evidence and the controlling idea. Highlight the revision.
4. Connections: Add an explanation that connects the two texts. Highlight the revision.
5. Transitions: Include a minimum of three transitional words or phrases to connect ideas. Highlight the transitions in your topic sentence and within your body paragraph.
6. Edit: Read your new and improved second body paragraph. Ensure the spelling, punctuation, and usage are correct.

Answer 1

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Answer 2

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