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I sat down in the middle row and waited for the teacher. I can't even make this up when I say that this teacher cartwheeled into the classroom! We all clapped and the teacher bowed. She said, "Hello Class! I am Mrs. Fizz or you call me Mrs.Z ! This lesson is about....FRIENDSHIP and ACCEPTANCE! I am going to pair you guys in to groups of 3 and y'all will talk about your interest." She pulled out a list from her pocket dress then she started to call out names. "Okay. I want Kelly, Jordan, and Lin over there. Jasmine, Opal, and Ilona over there. Jack, Hana, George and Pansy over there. Lastly, I want Freiia, Jac, Jax, and Raven over there." She pointed to everyone's placements, and mine was in the smack dab middle of the rainbow decorated classroom. I moved towards the middle to see two emo-ish boys and a softie barbie girl. I just looked down and played with my long flowing curls. Then one of the boys said, Hey I'm Jac and that is my twin Jax. That is Freiia or Frei." I looked over to Jax and I'm not gonna lie, there was something special about him and it made a spark go off inside of me. I looked over to Freiia and she smiled at me. That smile could brighten up a room. We started talking about our interests, turns out we have so much in common! We all love manga, reading, writing, video games, and just being ourselves. We checked our schedules and turns out we have 7 classes together out of 9! That is lovely. The bell rang and we grabbed our stuff and headed towards our lockers.

Answer 1

While I was at my locker, As I was getting a book some cheerleader slammed my locker and smirked at me. She said in a high pitch smug voice, "You must be the newbie. Heh, I like how you newbies think you can strut in my turf and try and take away what's mine!" I looked like her like she delusional, cause I did nothing of the sort. It was my first time meeting this Soupy twit. I sighed and said, "Good Morning to you to Barbie the brat version. Nice to meet you." She gasped and scoffed as she walked with her cheer friends. I smirked and walked back to Jax, Jac, and Freiia. We walked into class and we sat down. I sat against the wall with Jax behind me, Freiia in front, and Jac next to me. We listen to Mr. Birch talk about the same thing over and over again. Jax tapped me from behind my shoulder. I looked back and he whispered, "What happened at your locker with that crazy cheerleader, Maria?" I said, "She barked the wrong tree." He laughed and then said "You're very self- assured". I smile with a little red coming to my light brown skin and I turned around facing Mr. Birch in my face. This Mr. Tree Teacher said to me, "Mrs. Sterling Rose-." I interrupted with, "It's Raven and that's not my last name. That's my middle name but continue." He blinked and placed a packet on my desk. All 4 of us started laughing. He yelled, "This is QUIET TIME or YOU CAN CALL IT WORK TIME." I rolled my eyes and finished that worksheet in a breeze cause I was on a college level and this class is regular 10th grade level. I slammed the worksheet on his desk and smiled at him as he looked in shock. I pull out my book and I started reading, "Falling through the Earth" by Danielle Trussoni. It's a story about a father who is in a wild state of mind with his daughter. It reminds me of how me and my dad are. He left when I was 5 because he cheated on my mom and started a family with some widow he found. My mom didn't necessarily care because she was already seeing someone. While I was reading, Someone's pencil softly pulled down my book and it was Freiia. She whispered hesitainly, "H-Hey Raven, Can I come over after school?", I nodded and smiled.

Answer 2

This is my book and I would love if someone can edit a read this.

Answer 3

This is awesome, I would love to see how it turns out!!

Answer 4

Oml! Tysm! I am so glad I have support! Thanks Kayla😄

Answer 5

I read all of it and I thought it was nice, barely any grammatical error's. You'll go far.

Maybe fix this part in the second paragraph," I looked like her like she delusional." To, I looked at her like she was delusional.

In your last sentence of the second paragraph, place the comma before the ending quote.

Answer 6

Thank you! You keep helping people btw.

Answer 7

🤞✨

Answer 8

Good Luck on your book, it's amazing!!

Answer 9

Thank you! ✨✨

Answer 10

Nice job! Keep it up!

Answer 11

This is also very intersting.

Answer 12

I like it great job~

Answer 13

awwe like it so far :]

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ty :]

Answer 15

and np

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Np :}

Answer 17

Nice

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Thanks!

Answer 19

its very nice i can tell ur book will turn out very nice:>

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wow