I need criticism for this poem I'm supposedly supposed to be writing for Monday. This is a very rough draft and is nowhere near finished. 100% honest opinions will be greatly appreciated. Don't hold back!

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bruhgetrekt · Answer

Heartache (haar · tayk)
Heartache is the mind telling you you're not good enough.
It let's you know things are rough.
your passion for the love of your life burns like fire.
while the love of your life flies higher.
Looking back at this I realize judging love was a mistake.
Not everyone in this world is a fake.
While this may not be the end of love's journey,
this is definitely the end of our little tourney.

Sailor · Answer

Pretty good so far, I like how it rhymes and how interesting it is! :)

bruhgetrekt · Answer

Thanks! I appreciate it! :]

J4ke · Answer

Your poem is written by Spongebob
 Did you make it while watching pornhub?
Man give me a break I need to stop typing for god sake
look don't take it personal I'm just criticizing you 
I don't wanna be the one you commit suicide to :p
lmao

bruhgetrekt · Answer

Well there's some interesting feedback. Thanks I guess?

Trashy · Answer

@bruhgetrekt wrote:

Heartache (haar · tayk) Heartache is the mind telling you you're not good enough. It let's you know things are rough. your passion for the love of your life burns like fire. while the love of your life flies higher. Looking back at this I realize judging love was a mistake. Not everyone in this world is a fake. While this may not be the end of love's journey, this is definitely the end of our little tourney.

nice