Question

so i have this kinda poem i made like forever ago (wasn’t actually that long but still) but i want your opinions on it







- Without You -

I have legs, but without you
I cannot Walk.
I have a mouth, but without you
I cannot Talk.
I have eyes, but without you
I cannot See.
I have lungs, but without you
I cannot Breath.
I have a tongue, but without you
I cannot Drink.
I have a mind, but without you
I cannot Think.
Without you in my life,
I slowly Wilt and Die.
Cause withour you in my life,
You're the reason I'm Alive.
I have Knees, but without you
i cannot Kneel.
I have hands, but without you
i cannot Feel.
without you in my life, my angel from above.
without you, my heart falls weak, and your face
everywhere i go, everyone i see in every place
without you, my life is cold and blue.

Answer 1

nice

Answer 2

i like it

Answer 3

I love it 💙💙💙

Answer 4

ight

Answer 5

i like it do u think u can help me write a song abt the uy i like

Answer 6

kk
thank u

Answer 7

I love it, you should keep up the good work

Answer 8

i really love how you made every other line rhyme although in a poem most of them can be like that, but keep up the good work its really good hope to see more from you (:

Answer 9

this is really nice good job!

Answer 10

i really like it! keep up the good writing!!!!!

Answer 11

did a good job