So I'm writing a poem here it is so far! Please be respectful yet...truthful!

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Why can't you see the look in my eye?
The look that says don't give up on me yet.
When you see me I wonder is this feeling real?

It makes me think about how you've done wrong
Yet, so have I
Truce is what we need

The breath before we go under
Under down deep in this
This feeling suffocates me keeping me from breathing....

Just don't let go
Hold on tighter than before
I love you more than ever

Question

So I'm writing a poem here it is so far! Please be respectful yet...truthful!

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Why can't you see the look in my eye?
The look that says don't give up on me yet.
When you see me I wonder is this feeling real?

It makes me think about how you've done wrong
Yet, so have I
Truce is what we need

The breath before we go under
Under down deep in this
This feeling suffocates me keeping me from breathing....

Just don't let go
Hold on tighter than before
I love you more than ever

Aboveusonlysky52 · Answer

i like it and thats the truth i think u should continue dm me when ur done i would love to read the rest of it

Raynestorm · Answer

@aboveusonlysky52 wrote:

i like it and thats the truth i think u should continue dm me when ur done i would love to read the rest of it

I agree

Pusheen · Answer

Aw das sad man but real 🥲

karissafrazier · Answer

honestly reminds me of my bf

UrHawtieIsHere4U · Answer

Lmao I'll try to get more parts!

ILOVESPAGHETTI · Answer

You did very well :) nice job, i'd love to see more

kai6665 · Answer

fairly good. great job

izabelDB · Answer

reminds me of my bf he moved and me and him live 35 min away from each other and i hope he is not cheating on me with his sister because  we live in Alabama

UrHawtieIsHere4U · Answer

@4479 wrote:

it is ok

Thanks for being honest! Is there anything I can improve/change about it?

UrHawtieIsHere4U · Answer

@4479 wrote:

more detailed

Okay!

LandonGoma · Answer

I like it a lot. I think it's is very detailed, very self explanatory, very sad but has movement to where it shows your feelings not the other persons. but at least  "Truce is what we need" is my favorite part because it shows exactly what I need from other people................but other thing that awesome job!

UrHawtieIsHere4U · Answer

@landongoma wrote:

I like it a lot. I think it's is very detailed, very self explanatory, very sad but has movement to where it shows your feelings not the other persons. but at least "Truce is what we need" is my favorite part because it shows exactly what I need from other people................but other thing that awesome job!

Ty!

LandonGoma · Answer

@urhawtieishere4u wrote:

@landongoma wrote:

I like it a lot. I think it's is very detailed, very self explanatory, very sad but has movement to where it shows your feelings not the other persons. but at least "Truce is what we need" is my favorite part because it shows exactly what I need from other people................but other thing that awesome job!

Ty!

YW

kaciecowee25 · Answer

Good Job!

UrHawtieIsHere4U · Answer

@kaciecowee25 wrote:

Good Job!

Ty!