Here's my updated poem. Should I make it longer or keep it as is? Any suggestions on improving it?

I don’t know how to feel anymore
It’s like I’m in the middle of a storm
Of all these different feelings
That I don’t know how to explain

There’s anger and rage
Depression and hate
I’ve felt love and I’ve felt betrayal
I’ve felt strong and I’ve felt frail

With all these different waves
I don’t know how to think
All I want to do is sit and cry
And it surprises me no one wonders why

There are times when
It hurts like hell
And I turn to talk
But no one is there

Sometimes I feel invisible
I can tell I look miserable
I remember feeling irresistible
And my life is unpredictable

Question

Here's my updated poem. Should I make it longer or keep it as is? Any suggestions on improving it?

I don’t know how to feel anymore
It’s like I’m in the middle of a storm
Of all these different feelings
That I don’t know how to explain

There’s anger and rage
Depression and hate
I’ve felt love and I’ve felt betrayal
I’ve felt strong and I’ve felt frail

With all these different waves
I don’t know how to think
All I want to do is sit and cry
And it surprises me no one wonders why

There are times when 
It hurts like hell
And I turn to talk
But no one is there

Sometimes I feel invisible 
I can tell I look miserable
I remember feeling irresistible
And my life is unpredictable

anthony5012005 · Answer

leave it alone 100000/10 good job

Krissy525 · Answer

@anthony5012005 wrote:

leave it alone 100000/10 good job

aww thanks

anthony5012005 · Answer

yw

aldyn · Answer

good

Krissy525 · Answer

@aldyn wrote:

good

thnx

prettygirl09 · Answer

its good child <3

aldyn · Answer

@krissy525 wrote:

@aldyn wrote:

good

thnx

np

Krissy525 · Answer

@prettygirl09 wrote:

its good child <3

THNX MOM

aldyn · Answer

shoot I can play piano but I'm scared

YTStresssPG3D · Answer

Its good keep up all the work

Sailor · Answer

Nice job, Krissy.

prettygirl09 · Answer

@krissy525 wrote:

@prettygirl09 wrote:

its good child <3

THNX MOM

yw<3

Krissy525 · Answer

@ytstressspg3d wrote:

Its good keep up all the work

Thank you

Krissy525 · Answer

@sailor wrote:

Nice job, Krissy.

Thanks

YTStresssPG3D · Answer

@krissy525 wrote:

@ytstressspg3d wrote:

Its good keep up all the work

Thank you

anytime

Prettygirl29 · Answer

It sounds good

Krissy525 · Answer

@prettygirl29 wrote:

It sounds good

thank you

Prettygirl29 · Answer

ur welcome

hailey1 · Answer

@ytstressspg3d wrote:

Its good keep up all the work

I agree

Krissy525 · Answer

@hailey1 wrote:

@ytstressspg3d wrote:

Its good keep up all the work

I agree

thanks sis

Flippy · Answer

I like it so yk

Krissy525 · Answer

@flippy wrote:

I like it so yk

thnx ig

iloveyou69 · Answer

OMG THAT WAS SO GOOD I LOVE ITTTT 999999999999999999999999/10

Krissy525 · Answer

@iloveyou69 wrote:

OMG THAT WAS SO GOOD I LOVE ITTTT 999999999999999999999999/10

thank it

Krissy525 · Answer

@krissy525 wrote:

@iloveyou69 wrote:

OMG THAT WAS SO GOOD I LOVE ITTTT 999999999999999999999999/10

thank it

u not it oml

Cherrish2223 · Answer

That's was great

Krissy525 · Answer

@cherrish2223 wrote:

That's was great

thank you

IhelpUuHELPme · Answer

It's a wonderful poem, if i may ask, what type of poem is it? like what type of rhyme scheme did you use?

It seems ur 2nd, 3rd, and last stanza has a little bit of rhyming but i can't figure out what type of rhyme scheme you're using

Quite an interesting rhyme scheme, unless it's a free verse?

And about adding on or leaving it, my opinion is that you shld keep it as it as because your last stana basically gave a sort of conclusion/summary, it summed it up, so if you added more, it would feel as if ur dragging ur poem you know?

Krissy525 · Answer

@ihelpuuhelpme wrote:

It's a wonderful poem, if i may ask, what type of poem is it? like what type of rhyme scheme did you use? It seems ur 2nd, 3rd, and last stanza has a little bit of rhyming but i can't figure out what type of rhyme scheme you're using Quite an interesting rhyme scheme, unless it's a free verse? And about adding on or leaving it, my opinion is that you shld keep it as it as because your last stana basically gave a sort of conclusion/summary, it summed it up, so if you added more, it would feel as if ur dragging ur poem you know?

its a free verse, i really didnt use any rhyming scheme and thank you

IhelpUuHELPme · Answer

Ohh, that makes much more sense, wonderful free verse poem

the poem was good as a free verse because you used just enough rhyming to give it a sort of ring

Void13 · Answer

Hold up I really like this

aldyn · Answer

same

Krissy525 · Answer

@void13 wrote:

Hold up I really like this

aww thnx

queensclout12 · Answer

this could be a rap sonf 10/10

queensclout12 · Answer

song

Krissy525 · Answer

@queensclout12 wrote:

this could be a rap sonf 10/10

thank you

queensclout12 · Answer

No suggestions from me, I really like it ^-^

MusicGeek · Answer

it's soooo good. dont change a thing.

Krissy525 · Answer

@musicgeek wrote:

it's soooo good. dont change a thing.

thanks and ok

UrHawtieIsHere4U · Answer

Kris o-o so goooodddddd

Krissy525 · Answer

@urhawtieishere4u wrote:

Kris o-o so goooodddddd

THNX

UrHawtieIsHere4U · Answer

@krissy525 wrote:

@urhawtieishere4u wrote:

Kris o-o so goooodddddd

THNX

So relatable tho

ctomk3743 · Answer

That's a good poem

Krissy525 · Answer

@ctomk3743 wrote:

That's a good poem

thank you

ctomk3743 · Answer

Np

Hobo2004 · Answer

good

Krissy525 · Answer

@hobo2004 wrote:

good

thank u

oopdontknowher · Answer

it is amazing great job!

Ava1 · Answer

I like it! good job

joshcool · Answer

supra

Krissy525 · Answer

@oopdontknowher wrote:

it is amazing great job!

thank you

Krissy525 · Answer

@ava1 wrote:

I like it! good job

thank you

Krissy525 · Answer

@joshcool wrote:

supra

thank you

RodWav3 · Answer

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RodWav3 · Answer

knaw good job bruh

Krissy525 · Answer

@rodwav3 wrote:

knaw good job bruh

thnx

TheOgAccount · Answer

that's really good, I don't have any notes except you should continue it!!

itsmehjay · Answer

It sounds amazing as it is. You should know if you would like to continue or not. It's really up to you. Just keep adding more thoughts.

Krissy525 · Answer

@theogaccount wrote:

that's really good, I don't have any notes except you should continue it!!

ok thank you

Krissy525 · Answer

@itsmehjay wrote:

It sounds amazing as it is. You should know if you would like to continue or not. It's really up to you. Just keep adding more thoughts.

thank you, but i was just wanting other people's opinions bc im indecisive

JadynB · Answer

you could easily make this into a song

JadynB · Answer

its really good if you made it ryme a little more added a beat mabye made a coruse

ILOVESPAGHETTI · Answer

I feel like you perfected it amazingly. I personally don't have any suggestions, i think you did very well c:

Krissy525 · Answer

@jadynb wrote:

you could easily make this into a song

thank you

Krissy525 · Answer

@ilovespaghetti wrote:

I feel like you perfected it amazingly. I personally don't have any suggestions, i think you did very well c:

aww thanks

XxxBunnyxxX · Answer

mehh its  okayy ig

XxxBunnyxxX · Answer

jjk its   greattttttttttttttt

Krissy525 · Answer

@xxxbunnyxxx wrote:

jjk its greattttttttttttttt

thnx

dqeywhdcyr · Answer

Sugoi hito sore wa watashi no ikende wa subarashīdesu

joshcool · Answer

@krissy525 wrote:

@joshcool wrote:

supra

thank you

your welcome

Riah1 · Answer

Leave it how it is. It is great!! Keep up the amazing work!!<3

Krissy525 · Answer

@riah1 wrote:

Leave it how it is. It is great!! Keep up the amazing work!!<3

thnx

NoodlesAndRiceYT · Answer

Leave it alone and you dont need to make it longer, its perfect how it is right now and dont need any bigger :D great great job you have done.

Krissy525 · Answer

@noodlesandriceyt wrote:

Leave it alone and you dont need to make it longer, its perfect how it is right now and dont need any bigger :D great great job you have done.

aww thank you so much

NoodlesAndRiceYT · Answer

Your very welcome B)

XxMimiXx · Answer

this is suppperrrr good!!! great work

J4ke · Answer

This is dope you need to sing stop writing songs rap use vocaroo i would love to see what you can do.

J4ke · Answer

you can use bandlab too btw

babygirlXOXO · Answer

I love it 💖Its really good and keep up the good work😁😊

Krissy525 · Answer

@xxmimixx wrote:

this is suppperrrr good!!! great work

thank you

XxMimiXx · Answer

@krissy525 wrote:

@xxmimixx wrote:

this is suppperrrr good!!! great work

thank you

Yw

Krissy525 · Answer

@j4ke wrote:

This is dope you need to sing stop writing songs rap use vocaroo i would love to see what you can do.

ok, thank you

Krissy525 · Answer

@babygirlxoxo wrote:

I love it 💖Its really good and keep up the good work😁😊

thank you

babygirlXOXO · Answer

@krissy525 wrote:

@babygirlxoxo wrote:

I love it 💖Its really good and keep up the good work😁😊

thank you

YW😊

mdobbs6856 · Answer

on the 3rd line or the 1st stanza you could say "emotions" instead of "feelings" and not sound as repetitive.

aWaY · Answer

damn a poem man that could be a song

aWaY · Answer

good job

Krissy525 · Answer

@mdobbs6856 wrote:

on the 3rd line or the 1st stanza you could say "emotions" instead of "feelings" and not sound as repetitive.

ok thank you

Krissy525 · Answer

@away wrote:

good job

lol thank you

aWaY · Answer

duet maybe??

Krissy525 · Answer

Is it possible for anyone to make a beat for this?

hunter3506 · Answer

yea dude it is great it really get you thinking ab a lot a differnt things in your life

XxMimiXx · Answer

@hunter3506 wrote:

yea dude it is great it really get you thinking ab a lot a differnt things in your life

fr tho lol

hunter3506 · Answer

lol

jvxy · Answer

Relatable

Krissy525 · Answer

@hunter3506 wrote:

yea dude it is great it really get you thinking ab a lot a differnt things in your life

true and thanks

Krissy525 · Answer

@jvxy wrote:

Relatable

yea

Void13 · Answer

Lol this is the longest thread i think I've seen on here

Krissy525 · Answer

@void13 wrote:

Lol this is the longest thread i think I've seen on here

lol

BriannaFloyd · Answer

I love the poem keep it up <3

Krissy525 · Answer

@briannafloyd wrote:

I love the poem keep it up <3

thank u

BriannaFloyd · Answer

@krissy525 wrote:

@briannafloyd wrote:

I love the poem keep it up <3

thank u

yeah no problem

XxAceyxX · Answer

its awesome good job keep up the good work krissy!!!!!

Krissy525 · Answer

@xxaceyxx wrote:

its awesome good job keep up the good work krissy!!!!!

THANK YOU!!!!!

XxAceyxX · Answer

@krissy525 wrote:

@xxaceyxx wrote:

its awesome good job keep up the good work krissy!!!!!

THANK YOU!!!!!

your welcome girly!!

chrisdjackson · Answer

This how we know Juice WRLD set a good stage for our hearts 🖤

Krissy525 · Answer

@chrisdjackson wrote:

This how we know Juice WRLD set a good stage for our hearts 🖤

fr tho

BrokenMoon · Answer

make it a song

Krissy525 · Answer

@brokenmoon wrote:

make it a song

im trying lol

davidelgado · Answer

love it

Krissy525 · Answer

@davidelgado wrote:

love it

thank you

davidelgado · Answer

no prob

BADKARMA88 · Answer

I think you should keep it I think I will give it a 1000000000000000000000/10

ZdaddYjayjay · Answer

Leave it as iss, this shii hit hella hard neglll

Krissy525 · Answer

@badkarma88 wrote:

I think you should keep it I think I will give it a 1000000000000000000000/10

thanks

Krissy525 · Answer

@zdaddyjayjay wrote:

Leave it as iss, this shii hit hella hard neglll

thanks i will

Krissy525 · Answer

@badkarma88 wrote:

I think you should keep it I think I will give it a 1000000000000000000000/10

btw nice pfp

Krissy525 · Answer

https://vocaroo.com/14eTKxdEzQkt listen to this guys

laylasnii13 · Answer

I love this I felt your emotions i felt your pain Keep it up

Krissy525 · Answer

@laylasnii13 wrote:

I love this I felt your emotions i felt your pain Keep it up

thank you, that wasn't me singing tho

laylasnii13 · Answer

@krissy525 wrote:

@laylasnii13 wrote:

I love this I felt your emotions i felt your pain Keep it up

thank you, that wasn't me singing tho

Ye i figured But you know i always got you and i'm here i Love you

Krissy525 · Answer

@laylasnii13 wrote:

@krissy525 wrote:

@laylasnii13 wrote:

I love this I felt your emotions i felt your pain Keep it up

thank you, that wasn't me singing tho

Ye i figured But you know i always got you and i'm here i Love you

yes i do know that and i love you too

lyds · Answer

its great luv

Krissy525 · Answer

@lyds wrote:

its great luv

thank you so much

1008426 · Answer

That's amazing <3

Krissy525 · Answer

@1008426 wrote:

That's amazing <3

thank you

Cutie728 · Answer

I'd leave it as it is!

Krissy525 · Answer

@cutie728 wrote:

I'd leave it as it is!

ok i will thank you

JJ2024 · Answer

:)

JJ2024 · Answer

:)

Krissy525 · Answer

@jj2024 wrote:

:)

YRJ8498 · Answer

Its good

Krissy525 · Answer

@yrj8498 wrote:

Its good

thank you