so i made a song for the first time and uhhh yeah
~
Looking for better ways knowing it'd lead to better days
Eyes red not from drugs its from tears my eye
you told me we was gonna be forever
looks like you lied about that
Heart used to be blue and black
I really want you to come back
I thought we was meant to be
I begged and begged i even said please
She promised shed never leave
but i guess the way this life has to be
i would say im hurt but everything has a meaning and reason
i told them 2022 gonna be our season
you aint never gonna catch me slacking
You tried to get me but you failed
As you see im doing pretty well
Now its my turn to get you back
Safe the best for last with my special attack

Question

so i made a song for the first time and uhhh yeah
~
Looking for better ways knowing it'd lead to better days
Eyes red not from drugs its from tears my eye
you told me we was gonna be forever 
looks like you lied about that
Heart used to be blue and black
I really want you to come back
I thought we was meant to be 
I begged and begged i even said please
She promised shed never leave
but i guess the way this life has to be
i would say im hurt but everything has a meaning and reason 
i told them 2022 gonna be our season
you aint never gonna catch me slacking 
You tried to get me but you failed
As you see im doing pretty well
Now its my turn to get you back
Safe the best for last with my special attack

MochaBerries · Answer

@tetsxpreme

TETSXPREME · Answer

hottt i love it
<3

MochaBerries · Answer

@tetsxpreme wrote:

hottt i love it <3

thank uuuu<3

Flippy · Answer

AHH SHAWTY BAE ITS SO GOOD I WOULD DUET WITH YOU ONG

MochaBerries · Answer

@flippy wrote:

AHH SHAWTY BAE ITS SO GOOD I WOULD DUET WITH YOU ONG

DAMNN THANK U<3

Flippy · Answer

NP <3

shelovejayy · Answer

iz presha

admin · Answer

nice song you need to practice more and do your homework and be nice with your mom

anonymous198098 · Answer

yess

Astrid1 · Answer

Ehh, I get that most songs rhyme in some parts and some don't but for this being a 50/50 I like it but what genre of this would it go in? Rap? because I think it would sound good being rapped.

MochaBerries · Answer

@astrid1 wrote:

Ehh, I get that most songs rhyme in some parts and some don't but for this being a 50/50 I like it but what genre of this would it go in? Rap? because I think it would sound good being rapped.

i mean yeah it would go in rap lol

MochaBerries · Answer

and r&b lol ^

Alex1513 · Answer

This is good 👍🏻 but there’s some mistakes you can fix. Like when it says “ Eyes red not from drugs its from tears my eye“ you can say “ Eyes red not from drugs but from the tears from my eyes” Now this line “you told me we was gonna be forever”  You can say ( you told me we were going to be forever. I fix a little of it. But after all you did good, there needs to be fixing here and there but great job. If you need help feel free to ask

MochaBerries · Answer

@alex1513 wrote:

This is good 👍🏻 but there’s some mistakes you can fix. Like when it says “ Eyes red not from drugs its from tears my eye“ you can say “ Eyes red not from drugs but from the tears from my eyes” Now this line “you told me we was gonna be forever” You can say ( you told me we were going to be forever. I fix a little of it. But after all you did good, there needs to be fixing here and there but great job. If you need help feel free to ask

thank u!<3

Alex1513 · Answer

@mochaberries wrote:

@alex1513 wrote:

This is good 👍🏻 but there’s some mistakes you can fix. Like when it says “ Eyes red not from drugs its from tears my eye“ you can say “ Eyes red not from drugs but from the tears from my eyes” Now this line “you told me we was gonna be forever” You can say ( you told me we were going to be forever. I fix a little of it. But after all you did good, there needs to be fixing here and there but great job. If you need help feel free to ask

thank u!<3

Np just helping an other artist out

iloveyou69 · Answer

AHHHH ITS SO GOOD I LOVE ITTT <3

MochaBerries · Answer

@iloveyou69 wrote:

AHHHH ITS SO GOOD I LOVE ITTT <3

THANKUU<3

ILOVESPAGHETTI · Answer

this is really good for a first song ;o good job

PHANTOMPROGAMER · Answer

ah yo thats sus

PHANTOMPROGAMER · Answer

ayo!!

lyds · Answer

nice

MochaBerries · Answer

@ilovespaghetti wrote:

this is really good for a first song ;o good job

aaa tyty bob ;w; <3