A poem I wrote

Too The Woman Whom I Call Mom In 2005 you gave life too your 4th child 3rd daughter father wasn't around so it was only you raising us up all alone after you got the phone call that he passed two year old me toddled into your lap as you held me and cried that night I know we don't always get along but that's because I feel like I don't belong Im only 18 tryna get through this life slowly please bear with me I havent quite found myself yet but I'm trying I apologize for the times I betrayed your trust I hope you'll come too find you have too accept me for who I really am 100 percent not just a little bit I'll try too not start arguments anymore I just wanna get along with you for who you are

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A poem I wrote

Too The Woman Whom I Call Mom In 2005 you gave life too your 4th child 3rd daughter father wasn't around so it was only you raising us up all alone after you got the phone call that he passed two year old me toddled into your lap as you held me and cried that night I know we don't always get along but that's because I feel like I don't belong Im only 18 tryna get through this life slowly please bear with me I havent quite found myself yet but I'm trying I apologize for the times I betrayed your trust I hope you'll come too find you have too accept me for who I really am 100 percent not just a little bit I'll try too not start arguments anymore I just wanna get along with you for who you are

pennalopee · Answer

This is good keep up the good work and don't give up or anything thank you for sharing this with us I love it and if you have more please tag me in it I would love to see them

D3AD4YOU · Answer

This is very deep and heartfelt dill, I love how you put so much effort and emotion into this. Never give up and like I always told you... use everything bad you got going on and write it down and use it to express how you feel. You are not alone, people like to hear pain songs and poems because they can relate to them. Never fold dill, keep it up!

RodrigoGuevara · Answer

The overall message was fine but you've got an almost nonexistent sentence structure, misspelled "To" with "Too", added "4th" and "3rd" instead of spelling out "Forth" and "Third", and have zero end punctuation.

urdadizhere · Answer

@pennalopee wrote:

This is good keep up the good work and don't give up or anything thank you for sharing this with us I love it and if you have more please tag me in it I would love to see them

Will do thx

pennalopee · Answer

@urdadizhere wrote:

@pennalopee wrote:

This is good keep up the good work and don't give up or anything thank you for sharing this with us I love it and if you have more please tag me in it I would love to see them

Will do thx

Yeah np

urdadizhere · Answer

@rodrigoguevara wrote:

The overall message was fine but you've got an almost nonexistent sentence structure, misspelled "To" with "Too", added "4th" and "3rd" instead of spelling out "Forth" and "Third", and have zero end punctuation.

Thanks so much

urdadizhere · Answer

@d3ad4you wrote:

This is very deep and heartfelt dill, I love how you put so much effort and emotion into this. Never give up and like I always told you... use everything bad you got going on and write it down and use it to express how you feel. You are not alone, people like to hear pain songs and poems because they can relate to them. Never fold dill, keep it up!

Thank you

lea0728 · Answer

it is varry feeling like? dark but comeing of age type of thing. i love this i feel like a lot of ppl can relate to this

D3AD4YOU · Answer

@lea0728 wrote:

it is varry feeling like? dark but comeing of age type of thing. i love this i feel like a lot of ppl can relate to this

😏

lea0728 · Answer

@d3ad4you wrote:

@lea0728 wrote:

it is varry feeling like? dark but comeing of age type of thing. i love this i feel like a lot of ppl can relate to this

😏

why the emoji-

D3AD4YOU · Answer

@lea0728 wrote:

@d3ad4you wrote:

@lea0728 wrote:

it is varry feeling like? dark but comeing of age type of thing. i love this i feel like a lot of ppl can relate to this

😏

why the emoji-

Dont ask questions

Beako · Answer

Radical!