Question

I'm currently working on a story just for fun. Do you have any tips? Also, is there anything I did wrong here? Please tell me so I can fix it.

Answer 1

“No.”

No was all I could say as I saw those purple eyes once more. It’s been years. I thought it would never return after I moved far, far away from the place where I saw them for the first time.

But no.

It’s there.

It’s there and I don’t know what to do.

I back up all the way to the headboard of my bed, too afraid to get up and run. The person moved closer to me slowly, and I watched fearfully as it reached it’s hand out to grab my face.

It started mumbling something, but I couldn’t understand. It moved closer, and closer, until finally I could see it’s face. It was like a demon. A very, very murderous demon. And I thought it wanted to kill me.

But no.

I was wrong.

It doesn’t want that. No, no.. it doesn’t.

It growls softly as it looks down on me, and my breath starts to heavy. I want to move. I want to run. But I can’t.

It then grabs me and suddenly, it all goes black. I’m not dead. I can breathe. But.. where am I?

Answer 2

that is really good, ngl

Answer 3

and no nothing I can see that needs to be fixed, u did pretty well! :D

Answer 4

nice