I've been working on a project for my class,I'm looking for feedback if there is anything I should add to it.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1CHAwzgdmdwOyb0dkXgq3WY-48RYXB5tcrj3BCdqTiP0/edit?usp=sharing

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5StarFab · Answer

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adrianluvvsyouu2 · Answer

There's a lot of misspelled words and missing spaces

Apart from the grammar mistakes it sounds really disorganized in many areas:

You seem to have themes such as historical racist beliefs and practices, so you should make that a single paragraph, or a paragraph about the effects of racism

Some phrases such as "white privilege nonsense" or "just stupid in my opinion" are very unprofessional. Avoid using the first person too much

"Orangeed up" and "keep your religion out of my face" are also plaid rude and informal, and should be immediately removed. Religion is the basis of Martin Luther Kings argument against racism, and you will understand this when reading A Letter from Birmingham Jail, a famous text in American history.

Fact check Zurara's role in racism, be more specific about what his writings did (Glorify the Portuguese slave trade, which transported the most enslaved people across the Atlantic, more than any other country in Europe.)

We did not evolve from monkeys, this is false. We share a common ancestor with primates, which is very different.

You give a lot of examples like "Another example of racism..." without showing how it relates to your overall idea. Quality > quantity, elaborate on the few most powerful ones and tie them back into your idea.

Rewrite your introduction and conclusion to define racism and its origins more clearly, you're off to a decent start but a lot needs to be fixed to be factual and professional.

adrianluvvsyouu2 · Answer

Censorship on the f*ked up part btw ^ made that look like "Oranged"

adrianluvvsyouu2 · Answer

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xXAikoXx · Answer

@adrianluvvsyouu2 wrote:

There's a lot of misspelled words and missing spaces Apart from the grammar mistakes it sounds really disorganized in many areas: You seem to have themes such as historical racist beliefs and practices, so you should make that a single paragraph, or a paragraph about the effects of racism Some phrases such as "white privilege nonsense" or "just stupid in my opinion" are very unprofessional. Avoid using the first person too much "Orangeed up" and "keep your religion out of my face" are also plaid rude and informal, and should be immediately removed. Religion is the basis of Martin Luther Kings argument against racism, and you will understand this when reading A Letter from Birmingham Jail, a famous text in American history. Fact check Zurara's role in racism, be more specific about what his writings did (Glorify the Portuguese slave trade, which transported the most enslaved people across the Atlantic, more than any other country in Europe.) We did not evolve from monkeys, this is false. We share a common ancestor with primates, which is very different. You give a lot of examples like "Another example of racism..." without showing how it relates to your overall idea. Quality > quantity, elaborate on the few most powerful ones and tie them back into your idea. Rewrite your introduction and conclusion to define racism and its origins more clearly, you're off to a decent start but a lot needs to be fixed to be factual and professional.

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