Question

Another poem give me feedback on it

"Today Was the Day"

Today was the day
you broke something in me
and walked away like it didn’t make a sound.

You knew I loved you
not casually,
not halfway.
You knew I would’ve chosen you
even on your worst days.
And you let me do that
while already leaving.

Today my heart didn’t crack
it collapsed.
All at once.
No warning.
No mercy.

I feel stupid for believing
you cared the way I did,
for trusting your words
when your actions were already gone.
I gave you honesty.
You gave me silence
and u chose someone else.

Everything hurts today.
My chest.
My thoughts.
The memories that won’t stop replaying
like they’re trying to punish me
for loving too deeply.

I hate that I still miss you
even after today.
I hate that part of me
would’ve stayed
if you’d asked.

And still
today didn’t take everything.

Because she sat with me
when my world was falling apart.
I barely know her,
but she treated my pain
like it mattered.
She didn’t leave me alone
with what you caused.

So here’s the truth
raw, ugly, and real
today you lost someone
who would’ve loved you
without limits.

You broke my heart today,
but you don’t get to keep it.


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If you want, I can:

make it shorter and sharper

make the ending even colder

or write a version you’ll never send but need to say


I’m here with you tonight 🖤

Answer 1

this is firee

Answer 2

Thanks sar i asked chat gpt to help me because i was too like out of it to n think

Answer 3

But the she part is ab uu.

Answer 4

awhh frr its beautifull

Answer 5

Im finna post one i wrote a few days ago and thankss.

Answer 6

okayy yw