Question

can someone look over this letter please?

Answer 1

Dear Ms. Vibert and the Financial Aid Committee,

Thank you very much for allowing me the chance to appeal the loss of my scholarship. I deeply apologize for the tardiness of this letter.

Although I need a 3.0 GPA to keep my scholarship, there were some extenuating circumstances that I hope you will take into consideration. I have a type of epilepsy that interferes with my ability to process and retain information. I met with Shelby Haggray and requested some academic accommodations at the beginning of fall term. Normally my epilepsy is well controlled by medication, but at the start of last fall term, I was having trouble with my insurance company and was unable to get the medication I needed, which impacted my learning negatively.

After Fall semester, I changed my note taking system, in an attempt to make everything simpler. All my notes were going to be taken on my laptop, and OneNote’s recording feature would make it easier for me to record lectures, which was an academic accommodation Shelby granted to me. However, while this system works great for some, it was a terrible idea for me. The wireless internet made it much easier for me to be distracted than a notebook and pen allowed.

I am working with my neurologist to keep my epilepsy controlled, despite my insurance company, and plan to meet with Shelby to discuss any necessary academic accommodations. With these provisions in place (and returning to a pen and notebook system of notes) I am confident that this coming year will be better than my first.

Thank you,
Alexandria Crabtree

Answer 2

Dear Ms. Vibert and the Financial Aid Committee,

Thank you very much for allowing me the chance to appeal the loss of my scholarship. I apologize for the tardiness of this letter. Although I was well aware that I needed to maintain a 3.0 GPA to keep my scholarship, I am able to justify for the lack of my academic performance, and hope that you will take this into consideration.

I have a type of epilepsy that interferes with my ability to process and retain information. I met with Shelby Haggray and requested some academic accommodations at the beginning of fall term. Normally my epilepsy is well controlled by medication. However, at the beginning of last fall term, I was having trouble with my insurance company and in turn, was unable to get the treatment that was necessary for my ailment, which had a negative impact on my learning abilities. After Fall semester, I changed the way I took notes, in a desperate attempt to make everything simpler for myself to understand. All my notes were going to be taken on my laptop, and OneNote’s recording feature would make it easier for me to record lectures, which was an academic accommodation Shelby granted to me.

While this system works great for some, it did lead to some downfalls. (YOU SHOULD NOT WRITE HOW YOU WERE DISTRACTED ON THE INTERNET BECAUSE THEY WOULD THINK YOU WERE IRRESPONSIBLE, BUT ADD LEGITIMATE REASONS THAT WOULD AID YOU IN YOUR ARGUMENT) Right now, I am still working with my neurologist to keep my epilepsy under control, despite the problem with my insurance company; I plan to meet with Shelby to further discuss any necessary academic accommodations. With these provisions in place (and returning to a pen and notebook system of notes) I am confident that this coming year will be better than my first.


Thank you for your time,

Alexandria Crabtree

Answer 3

Remember to change the reason why you thought the laptop wasn't a great idea or if you cannot come up with better reasons, it would be better to take it out