Question

Can someone help me write a good thesis for History? Please!?

Answer 1

What kind of topic were you thinking of writing about?

Answer 2

To what extent did the Puritans of colonial massachusetts acheive winthrop's vision of creating a "city upon a hill" which a corrupt world see and then emulate during the period 1620-1763

Answer 3

I kinda have my thesis down. but i do not know what to put for my intro stuff...like when you say Politically,............Economically,...........Religously,....

Answer 4

Okay... Politically, I guess I would ask what kind of government or organization led them - was it religious, secular, or a mix? What did they set out to do with the way they chose to govern themselves? How did they see their way of life as different from the rest of the world, or from Europe?

Those same questions can also be focused on how they viewed their economic goals as well as that of their religious beliefs. Why did they leave Europe in the first place? Was it because they believed in rediscovering the lost moral center that they felt was missing?

Answer 5

So far i have During the 1620's, the Puritans of Massachusetts Bay Colony achieved John Wi. vision of a 'city upon a hill' to a great extent, by politically, economically, and religously supporting and following the beacon that was upon them.

Answer 6

That's great! So now all you have to do is spend the next few paragraphs breaking that argument down and talk about how they did it. It looks like you understand that okay and have a good start. Were you worried about the grammar or wording, or how you were going to organize your paper?

Answer 7

well it is the details for the intro..

Answer 8

Like when i say Politically,....i do not know what to put

Answer 9

For politics, you can probably describe how the colony governed itself - who the leaders were, how they led, the kind of rules they set for themselves. For example, what was the colony's government like? Was it a theocratic one (a gov't based on religion)? Based on the sentence above, it sounds like the Puritans would have let their religious beliefs control how they ran the colony.

Answer 10

Politically, goverments were established during this period, for example the governer of Massachusetts, John W., setup a government that that was a state of church, religously, many puritans had to follow the beliefs, as they were law, many of the puritans beliefs were taken seriously, that the Bible was God's law. is that good for religion and political?

Answer 11

Based on what you wrote, it looks like you can probably cover both in the same thing. The Puritans were very religious, so it sounds like they would have tied both church and state together into one. One other question you might want to try and answer is that because the Puritans set it up, were non-religious people allowed to join the government? The answer can add more to that if you need it.

Answer 12

Economically, farming were their main focus during this period slaves came in from Barbadoes, although Ministers became a bigger role, young men were sent to Harvard College to train to be Prime Ministers, giving them power. no good?

Answer 13

Reading that, I get that their focus was on farming and that slaves were also used. It jumps right to Ministers, though, and I understand that part in sending them to Harvard to be educated. That might be better served in the politics section since they are going to use what they learned to run the colony. How does that sound?

Answer 14

I get it, but i dont know how i would set that up.

Answer 15

Economically, farming and slaves, from Barbadoes, was a big contribution to the period, although Ministers became a bigger role, young men were sent to Harvard to train to be Prime Ministers, this also gave them an advantage as they were excluded from any government taxation.

Answer 16

Based on what you've written, you could splice it together like this:

"Politically, goverments were established during this period, for example the governer of Massachusetts, John W., setup a government that that was a state of church, religously, many puritans had to follow the beliefs, as they were law, many of the puritans beliefs were taken seriously, that the Bible was God's law. Ministers became a bigger role, young men were sent to Harvard College to train to be Prime Ministers, giving them power."

...and with a little creative editing for clarity...

"Politically, the governer of Massachusetts, John Winthrop, setup a government that was a state of the church. Puritans' beliefs would become law and Puritans took their beliefs seriously. The Bible, as God's law, became the rules of the colony. Ministers were also given a bigger role. Young men were sent to Harvard College to train to be Prime Ministers, giving them experience that could be used in the colony."

Answer 17

OMG! THAT IS SO MUCH BETTER!

Answer 18

I also have to give a counter argument, so.....However, Anne Hutchinson and talk about what she did and her beliefs and how that brought it into questioning?

Answer 19

Also how would i do something that summarizes it al up to know that i am transitioning?

Answer 20

Okay, Anne Hutchinson... Hmm... From what I understand, Anne challenged the ruling hierarchy of the colony. She was smart, outspoken, and not afraid of airing her views. Remember what you've written above - the Bible's word was law, and the Puritans followed it to the letter. Ministers were key to running the colony.

Suddenly, Anne's popularity and her arguments challenging Puritan ministers' beliefs made her a threat to the colony's sense of stability and well-being. At least that's how the leaders saw it. So despite having this perfect "city on a hill", it wasn't perfect.

So, after describing the politics, economy, and the religious convictions of the Puritans, you could probably transition into the negatives with Anne's story - how she challenged the very society that built up the colony.

Answer 21

So i have to sum it all up and kind of restate the things i stated?

Answer 22

This is a DBQ intro
...so that is why i am confused on how to transition.

Answer 23

Yep, and that should finish your paper by tying all of the points you made into the last paragraph - Winthrop's city on a hill wasn't perfect, but it was for a while in their own world, at least.

Answer 24

Okay. I understand it know. THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR HELPING ME! YOU WERE SO MUCH HELP! THANK YOU!

Answer 25

Glad to help! :) Good luck in writing out your paper!

Answer 26

Also want to say great job on working through the essay!

Answer 27

Thank You! :)