Question

Does anyone want to update my rough draft of a SHORT essay about the 2013 NY soda ban?

Answer 1

New York City Mayor Bloomberg passed a bill in 2012 that banned the sale of sugary drinks larger than 16 ounces. This was mainly aimed at places that sell “super gulp” type drinks which can exceed 40 ounces. While people shouldn’t have to be policed on what they consume, they have given the government no choice. The human body physically can’t handle more than 16 ounces of liquid at once, so no one who consumes reasonable amounts of soda should really be affected by this ban.
The ban makes it more expensive to become obese. If someone really wants to get a large amount of soda they can just buy two. While it could be argued that the ban unfairly charges people for a product they should be able to buy, the truth is that the ban doesn’t affect anyone who doesn’t overindulge. Some say that the ban charges people for their bodily needs, but I think the scientific community would be baffled if it saw a person who is required to drink large amounts of soda to live.
When people drink less sugary sodas they will consume less calories, which in turn could lower the obesity rate. The average soft drink contains about 100 calories per 10 ounces. If someone drinks a 32 ounce soda twice a day, that’s an extra 640 calories per day compared to drinking water. That’s over a quarter of a person’s daily calorie allotment just wasted. The main point of opposition to the soda ban is that it inhibits people’s choices and that the government has no right to tell people what they can and can’t put in their bodies. These proponents don’t seem to realize that as long as they are drinking a safe and healthy amount of soda that nothing will change in their lives. People shouldn’t be upset when the government bans something flat out dangerous; I don’t think anyone would care if the government made it illegal to spread poisonous gas through the air. While they aren’t the same magnitude of harm, the concept is the same.
The soda ban shouldn’t be this controversial of a topic. It’s sad when people care more about drowning themselves in soda than they do about politics. It seems that many proponents are less angered about not getting the soda as they are about getting told they can’t do something. This is getting to be a huge waste of political and media time. People in other countries worry about if they can go to school or if they have enough food to eat while New Yorkers are crying about not getting enough soda. Many people aren’t even affected by the ban, and the ones who are are the targets of the ban.

Answer 2

You good.

Answer 3

It's not really about making it better, I just have to change it.