Need help on English essay.. Can someone help? I don't know if it's good, or too long. The assignment said to not do the conclusion yet, so I know that part's missing. Will fan and give medal.

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kmullis6 · Answer

Martin Luther King Jr. showed the injustice of the world when he stated, ''Now is the time to lift our national policy from the quicksand of injustice to the solid rock of human dignity.'' At the time this was written, in a jail cell in Birmingham, Alabama, equality between whites and African-Americans was barely heard of. Few whites came to help when a black person was in danger; you could be lying half dead in the street and next to no one would care all because of the color of your skin. They were even made to use colored bathrooms, and sit in the backs of buses. Patience had grown very thin, and they were not willing to stand for it much longer; so, they took a stand for what they knew was right. Martin Luther King Jr. uses rhetorical questions, imagery, and similes to make his readers understand their lack of patience and to influence them to fight for equality. 

	First off, we have rhetorical questions, which was a great way for King to make his readers think. ''Now, what is the difference between the two? How does one determine whether a law is just or unjust? A just law is a man made code that squares with the moral law or the law of God. An unjust law is a code that is out of harmony with the moral law.'' King's goal was to show that inequality was an unjust law, and that it was neither the law of God, nor a moral law. It was done because of society's view and what they believed was just.  ''...have never felt the stinging darts of segregation...'' King uses a dart to symbolize that segregation hurt many people. 
	
    King used imagery as a way to very easily help the readers understand his and many other's plea for equality. It was stated, ''...when you have seen hate filled policemen curse, kick and even kill your black brothers and sisters; when you see the vast majority of your twenty million Negro brothers smothering in an airtight cage of poverty in the midst of an affluent society...'', you can only but imagine what actually happened and what these people have to go through. Lastly, we have, ''When you suddenly find your tongue twisted and your speech stammering as you seek to explain to your six year old daughter why she can't go to the public amusement park that has just been advertised on television, and see tears welling up in her eyes when she is told that Funtown is closed to colored children, and see ominous clouds of inferiority beginning to form in her little mental sky, and see her beginning to distort her personality by developing an unconscious bitterness toward white people; when you have to concoct an answer for a five year old son who is asking: "Daddy, why do white people treat colored people so mean?'' I can't imagine having to tell my child they couldn't go to a theme park because of the color of their skin. So by showing this example of imagery, King gives one that most adults can all agree on... It would break their heart to tell their child, that all because of their skin color, there were not allowed to have fun. Also, it shows that when growing up, if shown a certain race has dominance, it could lead to them having bitterness toward that race.

anonymous · Answer

what grade are you in?

kmullis6 · Answer

9th.

anonymous · Answer

Ok. It looks like it's a fairly well written essay for a 9th grader. However, there are a few things that can be done to make it better. Do you know if your teacher likes "fluff" or not?

anonymous · Answer

Martin Luther King Jr. showed the injustice of the world when he stated, ''Now is the time to lift our national policy from the quicksand of injustice to the solid rock of human dignity.'' At the time this was written, equality between whites and African-Americans was rarely heard of. Few whites came to help when an African-American was in danger. They were required to use bathrooms made for colored people and sit in the backs of buses. Patience had grown very thin, and they were not willing to stand for it much longer. So, they took a stand for what they knew was right. Martin Luther King Jr. uses rhetorical questions, imagery, and similes to make his readers understand their lack of patience and to influence them to fight for equality. @kmullis6

kmullis6 · Answer

What's fluff?

kmullis6 · Answer

@solidrebirth

anonymous · Answer

useless words and sentences that make the paragraphs appear larger (or full).

kmullis6 · Answer

The first paragraph was reviewed by my teacher (sorry about not mentioning that). He said it sounded good, so I guess he's cool with it.

anonymous · Answer

alright, then the opening sentences for the body paragraphs should be stronger. Right now they sound very "text-like."

anonymous · Answer

well, the last body paragraph has a pretty strong opening statement. 
So the one you should work on is the "First off..." one.

anonymous · Answer

you should say that- King's goal was to show that inequality is comparable to an unjust law. 
Another thing- I don't know if your teacher prefers for you to use present tense, but you will have to use it when writing these types of essays later on. It's best to start sooner than later.