Question

Here's something I've been working on for my English/writing class,https://docs.google.com/document/d/1n9jqWIkhEvB3pJeY8S3mdEe7u2FiXLJsNhO8oDXO6YM/edit?usp=sharing

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wow

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That's nice

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Is English your strong suit?

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That's nice

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I suck at English negl

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ima tag you in a post with some of my anime edits/recent edits @tyrun

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It's really good. But I feel like that the paragraph's are a bit too short, if you think you have enough substance that's cool. But that's just me.

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honestly couldn't have done it better myself
round of a applause to u

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I read the story in class once.

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A really good one too.

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Waitttt, this is actually a good story and I love mystery books or plots like this. Good job !!

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10/10

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good job

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I know you're not asking for advice but I don't think you should include "I believe". The person reading the text knows that you're writing it and therefore believing it

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Your argument is solid, but tweaking a few things could make it even stronger. First, calling it first-degree murder isn’t entirely accurate since that requires premeditation, and Mary’s actions seem more like a crime of passion—so second-degree murder or voluntary manslaughter might be a better fit. Instead of focusing just on her lack of remorse, you could emphasize how she went out of her way to cover up the crime—lying to the police, staging an alibi, and even getting rid of the weapon in such a twisted way. Her calm, calculated actions after the murder, like casually going to the store and playing the role of a grieving wife, show she knew exactly what she was doing. Tightening up these points would make your argument hit even harder.

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this is so fun

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w

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good jobb!

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w

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W

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w

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this is nice

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Because if you didn’t, please don’t be commenting on this